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1st Essay- Expository Essay

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“No Food for 40 Days”

Nowadays, most people are concerned about their health. They are really careful in eating and resting behaviors as well as doing exercises, while some people are obsessed with eating food no matter what, even though it is not healthy. How about if you tested yourself by eating nothing for forty days like Jesus did? What would happen to you?

We may wonder why Jesus got sent out into the wilderness and how he survived. It is certain that human needs food and water to survive. Following the real story of twelve young Thai boys trapped in the long cave, they had been stuck and survived deep down in the cave without any food for nine days. This story left a question that how many days people can live without food or water. In some studies, if a person tries to stop eating for a long time, but still drinking water, that person may survive for 30-40 days. Unfortunately, if human body has no food and water, the time human can live might be around a week, depending on age, weight, or health. After starvation, human could be dead in between 45-61 days. According to such studies, we can believe that when Jesus lived in the wilderness as a human, he could survive for forty days without food as long as his body was hydrated by any liquid.

Next question is what we learn from this. Can we become more like Jesus? Of course, that kind of testing is not something we should try. However, we can learn that food and water are necessary for human life but not everything. As early mentioned, some persons really like eating without any concern. As a result, they will get some effects such as obesity, high cholesterol, diabetes, etc. In contrast, individuals who are smart at eating and taking care of their bodies will not have those problems.

In conclusion, it is believed that this Jesus story makes us learn we should eat to live, not live to eat. Therefore, rich people are absolutely able to help poor people. The wealthy can donate some extra food which is exceed their need to the poor. As a result, humans will have kindness, the world will get better and peace, and the earth God created will be beautiful.

 

Friend Review:

Nowadays, most people are concerned about their health. They are really careful in eating and resting behaviors as well as doing exercises, while some people are obsessed with eating food no matter what, even though it is not healthy. How about if you tested yourself by eating nothing for forty days like Jesus did? What would happen to you?

We may wonder why Jesus got sent out into the wilderness and how he survived. It is certain that human needs food and water to survive. Following the real story of twelve young Thai boys trapped in the long cave, they had been stuck and survived deep down in the cave without any food for nine days. This story left a question that how many days people can live without food or water. In some studies, if a person tries to stop eating for a long time, but still drinking water, that person may survive for 30-40 days. Unfortunately, if human body has no food and water, the time human can live might be around a week, depending on age, weight, or health. After starvation, human could be dead in between 45-61 days. According to such studies, we can believe that when Jesus lived in the wilderness as a human, he could survive for forty days without food as long as his body was hydrated by any liquid.

Next question is what we learn from this. Can we become more like Jesus? Of course, that kind of testing is not something we should try. However, we can learn that food and water are necessary for human life but not everything. As early mentioned, some persons really like eating without any concern. As a result, they will get some effects such as obesity, high cholesterol, diabetes, etc. In contrast, individuals who are smart at eating and taking care of their bodies will not have those problems.

In conclusion, it is believed that Jesus wants to teach us we should eat to live, not live to eat. In addition, rich people are absolutely able to help poor people. The wealthy can donate some extra food which is exceed their need to the poor. Therefore, humans will have kindness, the world will get better and peace, and the earth God created will be beautiful.

(Review by Thippawan Tungsawat)

 

Rewrite:

Nowadays, higher number of people are concerned about their health. They are really careful in eating and resting behaviors as well as doing exercises, while some people are obsessed with eating food no matter what, even though it is not healthy. How about if you tested yourself by eating nothing for forty days like Jesus did? What would happen to you?

We may wonder why Jesus got sent out into the wilderness and how he survived. It is certain that human needs food and water to survive. Following the real story of twelve young Thai boys trapped in the long cave, they had been stuck and survived deep down in the cave without any food for nine days. This story left a question that how many days people can live without food or water. In some studies, if a person tries to stop eating for a long time, but still drinking water, that person may survive for 30-40 days. Unfortunately, if human body has no food and water, the time human can live might be around a week, depending on age, weight, or health. After starvation, human could be dead in between 45-61 days. According to such studies, we can believe that when Jesus lived in the wilderness as a human, he could survive for forty days without food as long as his body was hydrated by water.

Next question is what we learn from this. Can we become more like Jesus? Of course, that kind of testing is not something we should try. However, we can learn that food and water are necessary for human life but not everything. As early said, some persons really like eating without any concern. As a result, they will get some effects such as obesity, high cholesterol, diabetes, etc. In contrast, individuals who are smart at eating and taking care of their bodies will not have those problems and become healthy.

As mentioned above, it is believed that Jesus wants to teach us we should eat to live, not live to eat. In addition, rich people are absolutely able to help poor people. For example, the wealthy can donate some extra food which is exceed their need to the poor. Therefore, humans will have kindness, the world will get better and peace, and the earth God created will be beautiful.

 

Rough draft:

Nowadays, higher and higher number of people are concerned about their health. They are really careful in eating and resting behaviors as well as doing exercise. In the meantime, some people are obsessed with eating food no matter what , even though it is not healthy. How about if you tested yourself by eating nothing for forty days like Jesus did? What would happen to you?

We may wonder why Jesus got sent out into the wilderness and how he survived.It is certain that human body needs food and water to survive. Following the real story of twelve young Thai boys trapped in the long cave, they had been stuck and survived deep down in the cave without any food for nine days. This story leaves a question that how many days people can live without food or water. In some studies, if a person tries stopping eating for a long time, but still drinking water, that person may survive for 30-40 days. Unfortunately, if human body has no food and water, the time human can live might be around a week, depending on age, weight, or health. After starvation, human could be dead in between 45-61 days.

According to such studies, we can believe that when Jesus lived in the wilderness as a human, he could survive for forty days without food as long as his body was still hydrated by any liquid.

Next question is what we learn from this. Can we become more like Jesus? Of course, that kind of testing is not something we should try. However, we can learn that food and water are necessary for human life but not everything. As early said, some persons really like eating without any concern. As a result, they will get some effects such as obesity, high cholesterol, diabetes, etc. In contrast, individuals who are smart at eating and taking care of their bodies will not have those problems and become healthy.

As mentioned above, it is believed that Jesus wants to teach us we should eat to live, not live to eat. In addition, rich people are absolutely able to help poor people. For example, the wealthy can donate some extra food which is exceed their need to the poor. Therefore, humans will have kindness, the world will get better and peace, and the earth God created will be beautiful.