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 A day at the beach

            Spending a day at the beach is often awesome and especially for me.     A place that I enjoy going to is the beach it is seen as a place of relaxation.Sometimes we were tired a lot from school, work or anythings I think we should find something to do or someplace to go for me and I choose to go to the beach. For me I thinkmost of the beach all over the world are built purposively for leisure time and a lot of fun. A day at the beach is much better than a day at any five stars hotels for me.

         Swimming exercise at the beach is one of the most interactive activities. According to swimming is one of the best physical activities for overweight and obese victims. Spending a day at the beach is very significant since it promotes a healthy and active lifestyle.

           Building sand castles is another significant and common activities at the beach. The sand along the beach form one of the perfect and safe ground for various physical activities.A day at the beach may also have funny experiences of exploring the tides pools. For me I believe in seven wonders of the world, spending time at the beach can give me real testimonies.   

          People also go to the beach as a recreational area also. The volleyball nets strung tight as a harp. The hammocks swaying loosely in the nice ocean breeze. The beach is not only knows as a place to relax, but also as a place of beauty for me and I always loved the beach.

           I think we should do whatever we like and go anywhere we want if we can it same like Jesus went to beside the beach or when to Capernaum and everyplace you go sometimes have a season but sometimes have no reason. 

           it is a good thing that you know what you like to do for your life so don’t be afraid to do whatever make your self happy.

 

 

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How to be like Jesus by topic A day at the beach

          Spending a day at the beach is often awesome and I think ( Do not need )especially for me. A place that I enjoy going to is the beach it is seen as a place of relaxation. Sometimes we were tired a lot from school, work or anythings I think we should find something to do or somewhere (someplace) to go for me(and) I like (choose) go to (the) beach. For me I think most of the beach all over the world are built purposively for leisure time and a lot of fun. A day at the beach is much better than a day at any five stars hotels for me.

          Swimming exercise at the beach is one of the most interactive activities that is worthy for the family recreation. According to swimming is one of the best physical activities for overweight and obese victims. Spending a day at the beach is very significant since it promotes a healthy and active lifestyle.

          Building sand castles is another significant and common activities at the beach. The sand along the beach form one of the perfect and safe ground for various physical activities. 

            A day at the beach may also have funny experiences of exploring the tides pools. For me I believe in seven wonders of the world, spending time at the beach can give me real testimonies. It is interesting and fantastic to see hills form inside the water bodies.  

           People also go to the beach as a recreational area also. The volleyball nets strung tight as a harp. The hammocks swaying loosely in the nice ocean breeze. The beach is not only knows as a place to relax, but also as a place of beauty for me and I always loved the beach.

           I think in the world people should do whatever they like and go anywhere they want it same like Jesus went to beside the beach or when to Capernaum and everyplace you go sometimes have a season but sometimes have no reason. 

          it is a good thing that you know what you like to do for your life so don’t be afraid to do whatever make your self happy.

 

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How to be like Jesus by topic A day at the beach

           Spending a day at the beach is often awesome and I think especially for me. A place that I enjoy going to is the beach it is seen as a place of relaxation sometimes we were tired a lot from school, work or anythings I think we should find something to do or somewhere to go for me I like to go to beach. For me I think most of the beach all over the world are built purposively for leisure time and a lot of fun. A day at the beach is much better than a day at any five stars hotels for me. 

          Swimming exercise at the beach is one of the most interactive activities that is worthy for the family recreation. According to swimming is one of the best physical activities for overweight and obese victims. Spending a day at the beach is very significant since it promotes a healthy and active lifestyle.

          Building sand castles is another significant and common activities at the beach. The sand along the beach form one of the perfect and safe ground for various physical activities. 

            A day at the beach may also have funny experiences of exploring the tides pools. For me I believe in seven wonders of the world, spending time at the beach can give me real testimonies. It is interesting and fantastic to see hills form inside the water bodies.  

           People also go to the beach as a recreational area also. The volleyball nets strung tight as a harp. The hammocks swaying loosely in the nice ocean breeze. The beach is not only knows as a place to relax, but also as a place of beauty for me and I always loved the beach.

           I think in the world people should do whatever they like, go anywhere they want it same like Jesus went to beside the beach or when to Capernaum and everyplace you go sometimes have a season but sometimes have no reason. 

           it is a good thing that you know what you like to do for your life so don’t be afraid to do whatever make your self happy.

 

 

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How to be like Jesus by topic A day at the beach

           Spending a day at the beach is often awesome and I think especially for me also for my family too. A place that I enjoy going to is the beach it is seen as a place of relaxation sometimes we were tired a lot from school, work or anythings and I think we should find something to do or maybe go to somewhere for take a break and for me I like to go to beach. For me I think most of the beach all over the world are built purposively for leisure time and a lot of fun. A day at the beach is much better than a day at any five stars hotels for me. 

             Swimming exercise at the beach is one of the most interactive activities that is worthy for the family recreation. During holiday’s season, family and relatives from diverse background meet at the beach to enjoy our day. According to swimming is one of the best physical activities for overweight and obese victims. Spending a day at the beach is very significant since it promotes a healthy and active lifestyle.

             Building sand castles is another significant and common activities at the beach. However, the majority who have never experience the scene may remain to stare as the rest proceed. The sand along the beach form one of the perfect and safe ground for various physical activities. It is funny and fantastic to see huge bodies competing in different races along the beach.

            A day at the beach may also have funny experiences of exploring the tides pools. For me I believe in seven wonders of the world, spending time at the beach can give me real testimonies. It is interesting and fantastic to see hills form inside the water bodies.  

           People also go to the beach as a recreational area also. The volleyball nets strung tight as a harp. The hammocks swaying loosely in the nice ocean breeze. The beach is not only knows as a place to relax, but also as a place of beauty for me and I know I always loved the beach.

           I think in the world people should do whatever they like, go anywhere they want it same like Jesus went to beside the beach or when to Capernaum but everyplace you go sometimes have a season but sometimes have no reason.

           it is a good thing that you know what you like to do for your life so don’t be afraid to do whatever make your self happy.