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Mark

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Them : How to be like Jesus ?

Typed of essay : Cause and Effect essay

Topic : How you make the world to be better ?

          Nowadays our world has more natural disasters. Such as flood, earthquake, forest fires, storm and tsunami ect. Why is this happened ? How you make the world to be better ? Because of human this problem impact to natural and all living. The big issue is Global warming. There are high temperature and climate change. The effect might be more stronger. Therefore, We should to change and control something before the world getting worse.

Cause of global warming

  • The carbon dioxide (CO2) and other air pollutants and greenhouse gases collect in the atmosphere.
  • Most people like to use the own car cause make a air pollution.There are more industry for demand a lot.

Effect of global warming

  • Rising sea levels
  • The rising temperatures are hotter heat waves, more frequent droughts, heavier rainfall, and more powerful hurricanes.

For example, Typhoon Mangkhut at Philippines in 2018. There are destroy the building,killed the people and affected to other country.  such as Hong Kong, Thailand and china.

How you make the world to be better?

The easy step to reduce the carbon dioxide.

  • throw away the food less
  • Use public transport
  • Use renewable energy from wind, water and the sun.
  • The important is make a good attitude to new teenager

        If people are helping together and follow the advice the global warming might be better. As like as Mark, Levi or Matthew follower the Jesus. Then he maybe change and be a good person.

        The world is all living thing then people should cooperate and doing. It’s not easy to do this but if people try to change behavior and attend to the world. Our world will getting beautiful. As like Mark (2 : 9-10) said “…which is easier to say to paralytic or to say get up!take your mat and walking ?…” it’s mean to say are easier then doing.

Climate change

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Frist Draft

Them : How to be like Jesus

Typed of essay : Cause and Effect essay

Topic : How you make the world to be better ?

  • The connection of content doesn’t good
  • Make a list to of cause and effect to make easy to understand

    Nowadays our world has more natural disasters. Such as flood, earthquake, forest fires, storm and tsunami ect. So why is this happened ? How you make the world to be better ? Because this problem impact to our life, natural and animal too much. The big issue is Global warming that it’s the main affect to us. For example, There are high temperature and climate change. The effect might be more stronger. Therefore, We should to change and control something before the world getting worse.

The global warming is the average global temperature has increased cause of carbon dioxide (CO2) and other air pollutants and greenhouse gases collect in the atmosphere. The effect is the earth’s rising temperatures are fueling longer and hotter heat waves, more frequent droughts, heavier rainfall, and more powerful hurricanes. For example, Typhoon Mangkhut at Philippines in 2018. There are destroy the building, killed the people and affected to other country.  such as Hong Kong, Thailand and china.

    Everybody should know about this problem and should solve together.The easy step to reduce the carbon dioxide. For example, Reduce water waste, throw away the food less, Use public transport instead of own car and Use renewable energy from wind, water and the sun and make a good attitude to new teenager to love the world. If people are helping together and follow the good suggestion the global warming might be better. As like as Mark, Levi or Matthew follower the Jesus. Then he maybe change and be a good person.

    The world is all living thing so people are make everything and broke it. After this we should thinking and cooperate each other for stop the problem because it reduce impact that happening now. It’s not easy to do this but if people try to change behavior and attend to the world. Our world will getting beautiful. As like Mark(2 : 9-10) said “…which is easier to say to paralytic or to say get up!take your mat and walking ?…” it’s mean to say are easier then doing.

Frist Draft

Them : How to be like Jesus

Typed of essay : Cause and Effect essay

Topic : How you make the world to be better ?

          Nowadays our world has more natural disasters. Such as flood, earthquake, forest fires, storm and tsunami ect. So why is this happened ? How you make the world to be better ? Because this problem impact to our life, natural and animal too much. The big issue is Global warming that it’s the main affect to us. For example, There are high temperature and climate change. The effect might be more stronger. Therefore, We should to change and control something before the world getting worse.          

         The global warming is the average global temperature has increased cause of carbon dioxide (CO2) and other air pollutants and greenhouse gases collect in the atmosphere. The effect is the earth’s rising temperatures are fueling longer and hotter heat waves, more frequent droughts, heavier rainfall, and more powerful hurricanes. For example, Typhoon Mangkhut at Philippines in 2018. There are destroy the building,killed the people and affected to other country.  such as Hong Kong, Thailand and china.

       Everybody should know about this problem and should solve together.The easy step to reduce the carbon dioxide. For example, Reduce water waste, throw away the food less, Use public transport instead of own car and Use renewable energy from wind, water and the sun and make a good attitude to new teenager to love the world. If people are helping together and follow the good suggestion the global warming might be better. As like as Mark, Levi or Matthew follower the Jesus. Then he maybe change and be a good person.

       The world is all living thing so people are make everything and broke it. After this we should thinking and cooperate each other for stop the problem because it reduce impact that happening now. It’s not easy to do this but if people try to change behavior and attend to the world. Our world will getting beautiful. As like Mark(2 : 9-10) said “…which is easier to say to paralytic or to say get up!take your mat and walking ?…” it’s mean to say are easier then doing.