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Final draft

By Ratsameedara Nunkliang 

I’m interested in Augustus’ story because it sounds like he was so famous in the old time. From all the information I have found, he was once so powerful and smart. I’m not sure and actually I don’t know if his story is real or not. But because I think that it is attractive, so I likely to believe that it’s true.

Augustus was the first emperor of the Roman Empire who brought his own name as a name in August. He was born with a name Gaius Octavius Thurinus and he was the grandchild of Julius Caesar. In 44 BC, After Julius Caesar was assassinated, Augustus was appointed to be the adopted son and descendant of the political will of Caesar. 

Augustus was a wise person since he was young. He created the Roman Empire to be more beautiful than any other empire, and also spread the influence of the Roman Empire. He created the Roman Empire to have a strong army to prevent it from being destroyed. He also created the empire to bureaucracy, whether it is a tax or postal system. In those days, the army of the Roman Empire of Augustus was the greatest army in the world. About 300,000 men joined the army. In addition to building the empire, Augustus also built roads, bridges, tunnels to connect the kingdom with each other. Augustus also had a fleet of naval patrols in the Mediterranean. The creation of this army made the Roman Empire known throughout the world.

Rule in the Roman Empire in the days of Augustus was the only ruling or decentral. Augustus joined the forces of Mark Anthony and Marcus Lepidus. Augustus had power over Rome. But after the fall of the three, Augustus was given the power of the Roman Senate. Anyway, behind the deep, Augustus was the only authoritarian tyrant. Even after Augustus died, the Roman Empire was a strong and long-standing empire.

Augustus was famous for its generation until its present. The story of the Roman Empire was made into several other films based on real stories. Although the history of the Roman has been around since BC, but it is still a great history that people know to date.

 

Review 

By Panida Chanmai 

  • you should put some of your opinions in the passage too, so the story will be more interesting.
  • You should write the conclusion separately.

 

Second draft 

By Ratsameedara Nunkliang 

Augustus was the first emperor of the Roman Empire who brought his own name as a name in August. He was born with a name Gaius Octavius Thurinus and he was the grandchild of Julius Caesar. In 44 BC, After Julius Caesar was assassinated, Augustus was appointed to be the adopted son and descendant of the political will of Caesar. 

Augustus was a wise person since he was young. He created the Roman Empire to be more beautiful than any other empire, and also spread the influence of the Roman Empire. He created the Roman Empire to have a strong army to prevent it from being destroyed. He also created the empire to bureaucracy, whether it is a tax or postal system. In those days, the army of the Roman Empire of Augustus was the greatest army in the world. About 300,000 men joined the army. In addition to building the empire, Augustus also built roads, bridges, tunnels to connect the kingdom with each other. Augustus also had a fleet of naval patrols in the Mediterranean. The creation of this army made the Roman Empire known throughout the world.

Rule in the Roman Empire in the days of Augustus was the only ruling or decentral. Augustus joined the forces of Mark Anthony and Marcus Lepidus. Augustus had power over Rome. But after the fall of the three, Augustus was given the power of the Roman Senate. Anyway, behind the deep, Augustus was the only authoritarian tyrant. Even after Augustus died, the Roman Empire was a strong and long-standing empire, and was famous for its generation until its present. The story of the Roman Empire was made into several other films based on real stories. Although the history of the Roman has been around since BC, but it is still a great history that people know to date.

 

First draft 

By Ratsameedara Nunkliang 

Augustus was the first emperor of the Roman Empire. And brought their own name as a name in August. Augustus has the same name that Gaius Octavius Thurinus is the grandchild of Julius Caesar 44 years BC. After Julius Caesar was assassinated. Ovidius was appointed to be the adopted son and descendant of the political will of Caesar. Augustus is a wise man since childhood.

Augustus created the Roman Empire to be more beautiful than any other empire, and also spread the influence of the Roman Empire. He created the Roman Empire to have a strong army to prevent it from being destroyed. And he also created the empire to bureaucracy. Whether it is a tax or postal system. In those days, the army of the Roman Empire of Augustus was the greatest army in the world. About 300,000 men joined the army. In addition to building the empire, Augustus also built roads, bridges, tunnels to connect the kingdom with each other. In those days, Augustus also had a fleet of naval patrols in the Mediterranean. The creation of this army made the Roman Empire known throughout the world.

Rule in the Roman Empire in the days of Augustus was the only ruling or decentral. Augustus joined the forces of Mark Anthony and Marcus Lepidus Augustus Augustus, who at that time had power over Rome. But after the fall of the three, Augustus was given the power of the Roman Senate. But behind the deep. Augustus is the only authoritarian tyrant. Even after Augustus died. The Roman Empire was a strong and long-standing empire, and was famous for its generation until its present. The story of the Roman Empire was made into several other films based on real stories. Although the history of the Roman has been around since BC, but it is still a great history that people know to date.