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 How to be like Jesus by topic My secret dream      

         We all in the world have secret dream.  My  secret dream is to be a teacher. I have been dreaming of being teacher since I was very young. That time I think maybe I will change my mind in the future but  I  am wrong about that.

         When I was in 2 grade in elementary school, I was too shy to talk to somebody. Then my teacher inspired me with courage and hope. So, I thought to be a teacher like her and to inspire children with dream and hope through love. And most of all I was very interested in teaching knowledge to children who don’t know. This made me think of being a teacher.

My favorite subject is Math. I would like to teach a Mathematics in Middle or High school and university also. Although I am not good at it, it is still my favorite subject and I enjoy solving Maths problem and I have a lot of interests on Math.  To be good at Math. of course I need to be smart. But much more important thing is an effort.

        To be a teacher, I have to study hard. But I need strong leadership and good personal relationship as well. However I lack of leadership and am quite ingoing person so it might be very hard for me to teach students. But I will fix these weak points.

        Now, I am doing my best in studying to realize my dream and will prepare much faithfully.  I will read more and study hard. And I will resume to do exercise to be healthier. Physical health support me with studying and getting a job later. Of course, it may not easy. But old saying says “Where there’s a will, there’s a way”. Nothing can be impossible by continuous effort.

         For me I will always try to do my best for success my gold like Jesus always go around the world for teaching the Parable to people. 

 

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How to be like Jesus by topic My secret dream      

         We all in the world have secret dream.  My  secret dream is to be a teacher. I have been dreaming of being teacher since I was very ( “very”should be remove) very young. That time I think maybe I will change my mind in the future but i ( I ) am wrong about that.

          When I was in 2 grade in elementary school, I was too shy to talk to somebody. Then my teacher inspired me with courage and hope. So, I thought to be a teacher like her and to inspire children with dream and hope through love. And most of all I was very interested in teaching knowledge to children who don’t know. This made me think of being a teacher.

My favorite subject is Math. I would like to teach a Mathematics in Middle or High school and university also. Although I am not good at it, it is still my favorite subject and I enjoy solving Maths problem and I have a lot of interests on Math.  To be good at Math. of course I need to be smart. But much more important thing is an effort.

           To be a teacher, I have to study hard. But I need strong leadership and good personal relationship as well. However I lack of leadership and am quite ingoing person so it might be very hard for me to teach students. But I will fix these weak points.

           Now, I am doing my best in studying to realize my dream and will prepare much faithfully.  I will read more and study hard. And I will resume to do exercise to be healthier. Physical health support me with studying and getting a job later. Of course, it may not easy. But old saying says “Where there’s a will, there’s a way”. Nothing can be impossible by continuous effort.

            For me I will always try to do my best for success my gold like Jesus always go around the world for teaching the Parable to people. 

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Second  draft 

How to be like Jesus by topic My secret dream      

          We all in the world have secret dream.  My  secret dream is to be a teacher. I have been dreaming of being teacher since I was very very young. That time I think maybe I will change my mind in the future but i am wrong about that.

          When I was in 2 grade in elementary school, I was too shy to talk to somebody. Then my teacher inspired me with courage and hope. So, I thought to be a teacher like her and to inspire children with dream and hope through love. And most of all I was very interested in teaching knowledge to children who don’t know. This made me think of being a teacher.

My favorite subject is Math. I would like to teach a Mathematics in Middle or High school and university also. Although I am not good at it, it is still my favorite subject and I enjoy solving Maths problem and I have a lot of interests on Math.  To be good at Math. of course I need to be smart. But much more important thing is an effort.

          To be a teacher, I have to study hard. But I need strong leadership and good personal relationship as well. However I lack of leadership and am quite ingoing person so it might be very hard for me to teach students. But I will fix these weak points.

         Now, I am doing my best in studying to realize my dream and will prepare much faithfully.  I will read more and study hard. And I will resume to do exercise to be healthier. Physical health support me with studying and getting a job later. Of course, it may not easy. But old saying says “Where there’s a will, there’s a way”. Nothing can be impossible by continuous effort.

         For me I will always try to do my best for success my gold like Jesus always go around the world for teaching the Parable to people.

 

First draft 

How to be like Jesus by topic My secret dream      

         We all in the world have secret dream.  My  secret dream is to be a teacher. I have been dreaming of being teacher since I was very very young. That time I think maybe I will change my mind in the future but i am wrong about that.

          When I was in 2 grade in elementary school in Thailand. I was too shy to talk to somebody. Then my teacher inspired me with courage and hope. So, I thought to be a teacher like her and to inspire children with dream and hope through love. And most of all I was very interested in teaching knowledge to children who don’t know. This made me think of being a teacher.

My favorite subject is Math. I would like to teach a Mathematics in Middle or High school and university also. Although I am not good at it, it is still my favorite subject and I enjoy solving Maths problem and I have a lot of interests on Math.  To be good at Math. of course I need to be smart. But much more important thing is an effort.

           To be a teacher, I have to study hard. But I need strong leadership and good personal relationship as well. However I lack of leadership and am quite ingoing person so it might be very hard for me to teach students. But I will fix these weak points.

            Now, I am doing my best in studying to realize my dream and will prepare much faithfully.  I will read more and more and study hard also. And I will resume to do exercise to be healthier. Physical health support me with studying and getting a job later. Of course, it may not easy. But old saying says “Where there’s a will, there’s a way”. Nothing can be impossible by continuous effort.

             For me I will always try to do my best for success my gold like Jesus always go around the world for teaching the Parable to people.