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How to be stong?

Narrative essay

You never know how strong you are until being strong is the only choice you have.Sometimes people are put into situations that they can’t get out of or feel like they are stuck.

When I was young, I used to ask how we were born and what death was.When I was in elementary school, I experienced the first loss of my family.My grandmother died of cancer. After my grandmother had cancer a few weeks ago.At that time, my mother and I were very upset. And my mother told me that we can only rejoice.We have to be strong and move on.I do not understand what strong mean.We did memorialize her death every year. But the sadness of the family is gradually less.

When I was in high school, I found another loss of my family.I and my grandmother live in different city.She live in Bangkok but I live in Lamphun where is located in the north of Thailand.That day is my final exam day and I know that my grandmother has kidney disease and severe symptoms.I will go to see her that night but in the afternoon my father call me and I know that my father was crying and he could not say anything.I felt fear ,I don’t want to listen what he will say so he give the phone to my mother.My mother said with a sad voice “listen your grandmother already dead” I feel very painful because I can not go to see my grandmother and talk with her for the last time.

This loss makes me very sad. And Always remind me, time is never back.But everyone have to move on.I know my father is strong person and this time is hard for him  but he try to be strong and then he can move on.He told me that we must be strong for who we love that still living.

When I start the first year of university I have to make a new friends from different city.I have to adjust myself.I have to learn how to live alone in dormitory and do everything by myself.That time was hard for me because I never   live far from my house.I always give up and call my mother that I can not live there .But my mother told me that I have to grow up and I have to learn to live by myself.Everyone can not live with me forever.This is just small part of my life.I always  think how my mother and father grow up.I told myself someone else has a hard situation than me but they can passed.

Every time I feel discouraged and weak I will always remind that there are many more troublesome than me.

Jesus teach us to be strong and be patience and will bring god in my life.

 

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How to be stong?

Narrative essay

You never know how strong you are until being strong is the only choice you have.Sometimes people are put into situations that they can’t get out of or feel like they are stuck.

When I was young, I used to ask how we were born and what death was.When I was in elementary school, I experienced the first loss of my family.My grandmother died of cancer. After my grandmother had cancer a few weeks ago.At that time, my mother and I were very upset. And my mother told me that we can only rejoice.We have to be strong and move on.I do not understand what strong mean and when we die where we will go?We did memorialize her death every year. But the sadness of the family is gradually less.

When I was in high school, I found another loss of my family.I and my grandmother live in different city.She live in Bangkok but I live in Lamphun where is located in the north of Thailand.That day is my final exam day and I know that my grandmother has kidney disease and severe symptoms.I will go to see her that night but after I finish my final exam in the afternoon my father call me and I know that my father was crying and he could not say anything.I felt fear ,I don’t want to listen what he will say so my father could not say and give the phone to my mother.My mother said with sad voice “listen your grandmother already dead” I feel very painful because I can not go to see my grandmother and talk with her for the last time.

This loss makes me very sad. Anก Always remind me, time is never back.But everyone have to move on.I know my father is strong person and this time is hard for him to but he try to be strong and then he can move on.He told me that we must be strong for who we love that still living.

When I grow up I found a lot of situations made me felt down.when I start the first year of university I have to make a new friends from different city.I have to adjust myself.I have to learn how to live alone in dormitory and do everything by myself.That time was hard for me because I never   live far from my house.I always give up and call my mother that I can not live there .But my mother told me that I have to grow up and I have to learn to live by myself.Everyone can not live with me forever.This is just small part of my life.I always  think how my mother and father grow up.I told myself someone else has a hard situation than me but they can passed.

Every time I feel discouraged and weak I will always remind that there are many more troublesome than me.

Jesus teach us to be strong and be patience and will bring god in my life.

– Sorry for hear about you experienced of your loss in your family.

– Very interesting topic

Review by Suthathip Intharasak

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Second draft

How to be stong?

Narrative essay

You never know how strong you are until being strong is the only choice you have.Sometimes people are put into situations that they can’t get out of or feel like they are stuck.

When I was young, I used to ask how we were born and what death was.When I was in elementary school, I experienced the first loss of my family.My grandmother died of cancer. After my grandmother had cancer a few weeks ago.At that time, my mother and I were very upset. And my mother told me that we can only rejoice.We have to be strong and move on.I do not understand what strong mean and when we die where we will go?We did memorialize her death every year. But the sadness of the family is gradually less.

When I was in high school, I found another loss of my family.I and my grandmother live in different city.She live in Bangkok but I live in Lamphun where is located in the north of Thailand.That day is my final exam day and I know that my grandmother has kidney disease and severe symptoms.I will go to see her that night but after I finish my final exam in the afternoon my father call me and I know that my father was crying and he could not say anything.I felt fear ,I don’t want to listen what he will say so my father could not say and give the phone to my mother.My mother said with sad voice “listen your grandmother already dead” I feel very painful because I can not go to see my grandmother and talk with her for the last time.

This loss makes me very sad. Anก Always remind me, time is never back.But everyone have to move on.I know my father is strong person and this time is hard for him to but he try to be strong and then he can move on.He told me that we must be strong for who we love that still living.

When I grow up I found a lot of situations made me felt down.when I start the first year of university I have to make a new friends from different city.I have to adjust myself.I have to learn how to live alone in dormitory and do everything by myself.That time was hard for me because I never   live far from my house.I always give up and call my mother that I can not live there .But my mother told me that I have to grow up and I have to learn to live by myself.Everyone can not live with me forever.This is just small part of my life.I always  think how my mother and father grow up.I told myself someone else has a hard situation than me but they can passed.

Every time I feel discouraged and weak I will always remind that there are many more troublesome than me.

Jesus teach us to be strong and be patience and will bring god in my life.

 

First draft

How to be stong?

Narrative essay

You never know how strong you are until being strong is the only choice you have.Sometimes people are put into situations that they can’t get out of or feel like they are stuck. After we regret a lot. We will find the anchor.

When I was young, I used to ask how we were born and what death was.When I was in elementary school, I experienced the first loss of my family.My grandmother died of cancer. After my grandmother had cancer a few weeks ago.At that time, my mother and I were very upset. And my mother told me that we can only rejoice.We have to be strong and move on.I do not understand what strong mean and when we die where we will go?Then we use normal life.We did memorialize her death every year. But the sadness of the family is gradually less.

When I was in high school, I found another loss of my family.I and my grandmother live in different city.She live in Bangkok but I live in Lamphun where is located in the north of Thailand.That day is my final exam day and I know that my grandmother has kidney disease and severe symptoms.I will go to see her that night but after I finish my final exam in the afternoon my father call me and I know that my father was crying and he could not say anything.I felt fear ,I don’t want to listen what he will say so my father could not say and give the phone to my mother.My mother said with sad voice “listen your grandmother already dead” I feel very painful because I can not go to see my grandmother and talk with her for the last time.

This loss makes me very sad. Anก Always remind me, time is never back.But everyone have to move on.I know my father is strong person and this time is hard for him to but he try to be strong and then he can move on.He told me that we must be strong for who we love that still living.

When I grow up I found a lot of situations made me felt down.For example when I start the first year of university I have to make a new friends from different city.I have to adjust myself.I have to learn how to live alone in dormitory and do everything by myself.That time was hard for me because I never   live far from my house.I always give up and call my mother that I can not live there .But my mother told me that I have to grow up and I have to learn to live by myself.Everyone can not live with me forever.This is just small part of my life.So I think about that and I always  think how my mother and father grow up.I told myself someone else has a hard situation than me but they can passed.

Every time I feel discouraged and weak I will always remind that there are many more troublesome than me.

Jesus teach us to be strong and be patience and will bring god in my life.