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first draft

 

My favorite place is a bench on a small mountain in the hometown where I was born. I used to ride my bike with my childhood friends on mountain, and even ride a snow sled in winter. There was a grave on the mountain, and we used to be scared that we were demonized. Sometimes he played basketball at a basketball court on a mountain  and hit a badminton at a badminton court. After I became an adult, I used to go to the mountains and exercise sometimes. I turned around the mountain several times and exercised with exercise equipment in the mountains. After I got into the army mausoleum, I used to go to the mountains to exercise. And I used to go to the mountains when I was frustrated or worried. It was good to be able to see the state that there is when we go there at night. I can also see the city where I live. The city that looked big and wide at the time of childhood seems small now. When I go there, my childhood past passes.
Sometimes I meet people I know. I meet my friends in my childhood and meet my neighbors. Thinking about the place and the view from that place makes you feel at ease.

In fact, when I thought of my favorite place as an essay topic, I could not tell where it was. Where do I feel comfortable?  Because I have never thought of where I like to live

My favorite place is comfortable and I think it is a place where energy is charged. We think we need to know this place. If you live in society, you can get bruised and stressed, and you may feel tired. Then we can have time to think about why I was so hurt and stressed in that place then. If you are in such a place, it will help to draw that thought. But now I am in America. So I would like to find many places like this in the future. But I do not know which place is good. I searched in San Francisco for prayer and went to various cafes to find the place. The first one was good, but it was not good when I was two or three times. Here I found a new fact. I like the new place rather than the place I’ve already been to. I want to see new things and meet various people. I would like to compare the behavior of others, new people, culture, etc. with the place where I lived and what the difference is. I would also like to know where they originated from and their thoughts and culture.

 

revise

 

in the hometown-> in my hometown

in my childhood -> when i was childhood

where I like to live-> where i like to stay

second draft

My favorite place is a bench on a small mountain in my hometown where I was born. I used to ride my bike with my childhood friends on mountain, and even ride a snow sled in winter. There was a grave on the mountain, and we used to be scared that we were demonized. Sometimes he played basketball at a basketball court on a mountain  and hit a badminton at a badminton court. After I became an adult, I used to go to the mountains and exercise sometimes. I turned around the mountain several times and exercised with exercise equipment in the mountains. After I got into the army mausoleum, I used to go to the mountains to exercise. And I used to go to the mountains when I was frustrated or worried. It was good to be able to see the state that there is when we go there at night. I can also see the city where I live. The city that looked big and wide at the time of childhood seems small now. When I go there, my childhood past passes.
Sometimes I meet people I know. I meet my friends in my childhood and meet my neighbors. Thinking about the place and the view from that place makes you feel at ease.

In fact, when I thought of my favorite place as an essay topic, I could not tell where it was. Where do I feel comfortable?  Because I have never thought of where I like to live

My favorite place is comfortable and I think it is a place where energy is charged. We think we need to know this place. If you live in society, you can get bruised and stressed, and you may feel tired. Then we can have time to think about why I was so hurt and stressed in that place then. If you are in such a place, it will help to draw that thought. But now I am in America. So I would like to find many places like this in the future. But I do not know which place is good. I searched in San Francisco for prayer and went to various cafes to find the place. The first one was good, but it was not good when I was two or three times. Here I found a new fact. I like the new place rather than the place I’ve already been to. I want to see new things and meet various people. I would like to compare the behavior of others, new people, culture, etc. with the place where I lived and what the difference is. I would also like to know where they originated from and their thoughts and culture.

 

final draft

 

My favorite place is a bench on a small mountain in my hometown where I was born. I used to ride my bike with my childhood friends on mountain, and even ride a snow sled in winter. There was a grave on the mountain, and we used to be scared that we were demonized. Sometimes he played basketball at a basketball court on a mountain  and hit a badminton at a badminton court. After I became an adult, I used to go to the mountains and exercise sometimes. I turned around the mountain several times and exercised with exercise equipment in the mountains. After I got into the army mausoleum, I used to go to the mountains to exercise. And I used to go to the mountains when I was frustrated or worried. It was good to be able to see the state that there is when we go there at night. I can also see the city where I live. The city that looked big and wide at the time of childhood seems small now. When I go there, my childhood past passes.
Sometimes I meet people I know. I meet my friends in my childhood and meet my neighbors. Thinking about the place and the view from that place makes you feel at ease.

In fact, when I thought of my favorite place as an essay topic, I could not tell where it was. Where do I feel comfortable?  Because I have never thought of where I like to live

My favorite place is comfortable and I think it is a place where energy is charged. We think we need to know this place. If you live in society, you can get bruised and stressed, and you may feel tired. Then we can have time to think about why I was so hurt and stressed in that place then. If you are in such a place, it will help to draw that thought. But now I am in America. So I would like to find many places like this in the future. But I do not know which place is good. I searched in San Francisco for prayer and went to various cafes to find the place. The first one was good, but it was not good when I was two or three times. Here I found a new fact. I like the new place rather than the place I’ve already been to. I want to see new things and meet various people. I would like to compare the behavior of others, new people, culture, etc. with the place where I lived and what the difference is. I would also like to know where they originated from and their thoughts and culture.