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FINAL DRAFT

I like travel since I was in Thailand. Travel bring me here. I like to travel in the national park in United state. I found out the natural park here is very beautiful, and stunning scenic view. The United state has fifty states, all of them has plenty of places to explore.

Throwback to last three years when I started travel. My first trip was in Sounthern of California. I lived in San francisco. I falling in love in my city. San francisco is the place does not have snow and this place has less of rain as well. I have heard California state is one of the city where people want to live.

I start travel and I still travel. Last year around on August 2017, I was travel with my other four friends who came all the way from East coast. Our plan was travel to Lake tahoe, Oregon, Washington, Montana, Wyoming, and Colorado. We make a decision to go around by road trip. This was my first road trip. All of our menber is woman. It was very very long distance. Three of us were driver. It took twelve days to finish this trip.

We drove everyday. We drove at lease five hours a day, maximum ten hours. Our plan waa change the place to stay everynight. Because this is our first road trip, we drove a lot. During the day we stop on the way at the national park for hiking and sighseeing around and eating the delicious food.

We were enjoy with everything until We drove to Washington state. We have to drove to the hotel that we already booked. We about 1 hour away from our hotel.

Before sunset time. The sky was very beautiful. Everyone enjoy in the moment. Suddenly, deer ran the page our car. My friend sudden brakes. We hit deer. Deer dead and our car broke down. We couldn’t drive further more. We don’t know what we have to do. My driver very shock. Everyone shock aswell. People stop by and checking on us.

It is our first time. We don’t know how to deal with this then a couple old people stop to cheking on us. They told us how to solve the problem. We called 911, we called insurance, and we cancelled the hotel. The couple old people wait until we safe, they were called the place looking for the place to stay for us too. We found one. We got only one room for 5 of us sharing on the frightened.

We finally safe. We ate before go to the hotel. We invited couple old people join our dinner as well. Unless we are lucky to have couple old people helping us went throw the problem.

The car company was complicated. We contact them late night then it was not workwell. They are finally sent us the new car but we have to pay for the service. We wait up to one day for the car rental company changing. They are driving from Seattle to Washington. The big truck carry our car that is why it took long day.

We lost the whole day for wating. We have to change our new plan. When we got the car, we get ready very fast. We drive again. We drive to the next station, which is mean 10 hours more. We drive carefully. We do not have choice. We take turn to drive. We make sure everything perfect during the night.

The day after, we still have the rest five days on our trip. We adjust our plan to finishing the day before sunset and drive carefully.

This was a worthy trip for me. Our team help each other. We did a great job. We didn’t complain on each other and otherwise we graceful on the thing happening. We are survivor back home.
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FRIEND REVIEW

I like travel since I was in Thailand. Travel bring me here. I like to travel in the national park in United state. I found out the natural park here is very beautiful, and stunning scenic view. The United state has fifty states, all of them has plenty of places to explore.

Throwback to last three years when I started travel. My first trip was in Sounthern of California. I lived in San francisco. I falling in love in my city. San francisco is the place does not have snow and this place has less of rain as well. I have heard California state is one of the city where people want to live.

I start travel and I still travel. Last year around on August 2017, I was travel with my other four friends who came all the way from East coast. Our plan was travel to Lake tahoe, Oregon, Washington, Montana, Wyoming, and Colorado. We make a decision to go around by road trip. This was my first road trip. All of our menber is woman. It was very very long distance. Three of us were driver. It took twelve days to finish this trip.

We drove everyday. We drove at lease five hours a day, maximum ten hours. Our plan waa change the place to stay everynight. Because this is our first road trip, we drove a lot. During the day we stop on the way at the national park for hiking and sighseeing around and eating the delicious food. We were enjoy with everything until We drove to Washington state. We have to drove to the hotel that we already booked. We about 1 hour away from our hotel.

Before sunset time. The sky was very beautiful. Everyone enjoy in the moment. Suddenly, deer ran the page our car. My friend sudden brakes. We hit deer. Deer dead and our car broke down. We couldn’t drive further more. We don’t know what we have to do. My driver very shock. Everyone shock aswell. People stop by and checking on us.

It is our first time. We don’t know how to deal with this then a couple old people stop to cheking on us. They told us how to solve the problem. We called 911, we called insurance, and we cancelled the hotel. The couple old people wait until we safe, they were called the place looking for the place to stay for us too. We found one. We got only one room for 5 of us sharing on the frightened. We finally safe. We ate before go to the hotel. We invited couple old people join our dinner as well. Unless we are lucky to have couple old people helping us went throw the problem.

The car company was complicated. We contact them late night then it was not workwell. They are finally sent us the new car but we have to pay for the service. We wait up to one day for the car rental company changing. They are driving from Seattle to Washington. The big truck carry our car that is why it took long day.

We lost the whole day for wating. We have to change our new plan. When we got the car, we get ready very fast. We drive again. We drive to the next station, which is mean 10 hours more. We drive carefully. We do not have choice. We take turn to drive. We make sure everything perfect during the night.

The day after, we still have the rest five days on our trip. We adjust our plan to finishing the day before sunset and drive carefully. This was a worthy trip for me. Our team help each other. We did a great job. We didn’t complain on each other and otherwise we graceful on the thing happening. We are survivor back home.
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2ND DRAFT

I like travel. I like to visit national park in United state. I found out the natural park here is very beautiful and US. Has plenty of places to explore.

Throwback to last 3 years when I started travel. My first trip was in Sounthern of California. I lived in SF. I falling in love in my city. SF is the place doesn’t have snow and less of rain as well. I have heard California is one of the city where people want to live.

I start travel and I still travel. Last year around on August 2017, I was travel with my other 4 friends who came all the way from East coast. Our plan was travel to Lake tahoe, Oregon, Washington, Montana, Wyoming, and Colorado. We make a decision to go around by road trip. This was my first road trip. All of our menber is woman. It was very very long distance and 3 of us were driver. It took 12 days to finish this trip.

We drove everyday. We drove at lease 5 hours a day, maximum 10 hours. We also change the place to stay everynight. Because this is our first road trip, we drove a lot. During the day we stop on the way at the national park for hiking and sighseeing around.

We were enjoy with everything until We drove to Washington state. We have to drove to the hotel that we already booked. We about around 1 hour away from from our hotel. Suddenly, deer ran the page our car. My friend sudden brakes. We hit deer. Deer dead and our car broke down. We couldn’t drive further more. We don’t know what we have to do. My driver very shock. Everyone shock aswell. People stop by and checking on us.

It is our first time. We don’t know how to deal with this then a couple old people stop to cheking on us. They told us how to solve the problem. We called 911, we called insurance, and we cancelled the hotel. The couple old people wait until we safe, they were called the place looking for the place to stay for us too. We found one. We got only one room for 5 of us sharing on the frightened.

We finally safe. We ate before go to the hotel. We invited couple old people join our dinner as well. We have to wait up to 1 day for the car rental company changing new car for us. They are driving from Seattle to Washington. The big truck carry our car that is why it took long day. We lost the whole day for wating. We have to change our new plan. When we got the car, we get ready to drie to the next station, which is mean 10 hours more. We drive carefully. We don’t have choice. We take turn to drive. We make sure everything ok during the night.

The day after, we still have the rest 5 days on our trip. We adjust our plan to finishing the day before sunset and drive carefully. This was a worthy trip for me. Our team help each other. We did a great job. We didn’t complain on each other and otherwise we graceful on the thing happening. We are survivor back home.
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1ST DRAFT

I like travel. I like to visit national park in United state. I found out the natural park here is very beautiful and US. Has plenty of places to explore.

I falling in love in my city. SF is the place doesn’t have snow and less of rain as well. I have heard California is one of the city where people want to live.

I start travel and I still travel. Last year around on August 2017, I was travel with my other 4 friends. Our plan was travel to Lake tahoe, Oregon, Washington, Montana, Wyoming, and Colorado. We make a decision to go around by road trip. This was my first road trip. All of our menber is woman. It was very very long distance and 3 of us were driver. It took 12 days to finish this trip. We drove everyday. We drove at lease 5 hours a day, maximum 10 hours. We also change the place to stay everynight. Because this is our first road trip, we drove a lot. During the day we stop on the way at the national park for hiking and sighseeing around.

We were enjoy with everything until We drove to Washington state. We have to drove to the hotel that we already booked. Suddenly, deer ran the page our car. My friend sudden brakes. We hit deer. Deer dead and our car broke down. We couldn’t drive further more. We don’t know what we have to do. My driver very shock. Everyone shock aswell. People stop by and checking on us.

It is our first time. We don’t know how to deal with this then a couple old people stop to cheking on us. They told us how to solve the problem. We called 911, we called insurance, and we cancelled the hotel. The couple old people wait until we safe, they were called the place looking for the place to stay for us too. We found one. We got only one room for 5 of us sharing on the frightened.

We finally safe. We ate before go to the hotel. We invited couple old people join our dinner as well. We have to wait up to 1 day for the car rental company changing new car for us. They are driving from Seattle to Washington. We lost the whole day for wating. We have to change our new plan. When we got the car, we get ready to drie to the next station, which is mean 10 hours more. We drive carefully. We don’t have choice. We take turn to drive. We make sure everything ok during the night.

The day after, we still have the rest 5 days on our trip. We adjust our plan to finishing the day before sunset and drive carefully. This was a worthy trip for me. Our team help each other. We did a great job.