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Final writing- 4th essay

Lord determines my step in my life- My favorite places in Bekerley

I have been in California.US about 7 months. I really appreciate being in this State.Because the air is so clean and fresh also the sky is blue and very sunny and beautitul weather. The most people are nice and kind. When they are meeting on the street always saying “Hello~” “Hi~” “How are you?” with smiling.

For the first time, I was really so shy and embarrassed but I was trying to say just like that “Hello~” “Hi~” with smiling. Recently I think that I feel like more comfortabe and enjoy saying “Hello~” to someone.

A months ago, I have moved to Berkeley. My new place is close to UC Berkeley University. There are a lot of international students

like Korean,Chinese.Indian.European.etc I think Berkeley is very open-minded and liberal place so I can feel more free and comfortable also very interested in this area.

I used to get up late in the morning before. I was a sleepyhead in Korea.However I can wake up early in the morning in these days. I love to walk and look around the Berkeley village in the morning. There are so beautiful and gorgeous houses like villas, tall trees and forest,castle hotel,antique and small shops also delicous bakery and town cafe and restaurants in there.

Sometimes I imagine that I am walking in this street in my dream just like movie.

That is my favorite places in Berkeley.California.US.

 

The second my favorite place is Bookstore and Library in this area. There are

a few book store. One of bookstore is Pegasus. It has a lot of and various books.

I have found some books what I want to read so I have bought them.

I really feel very peaceful and calm to be in the bookstore and library

whenever I am in these places. I am pretty sure the books makes me happy

I often go to UC Berkeley campus in my free time because I can see many students in there. They are always studying anywhere ilke benches, school cafeteria.cafe,library and on the grass in the campus.

I was so impressed they are using their laptop computer “Apple” for a textbook and doing their homework. So they are so quite and very focused on the computer. Somtimes I imagined in Korea. American students are discussing with classmates and talking about many kinds of theme. But they are very different.

School are changing by the students and the current of the time.

Whenever I do my homwork in this campus I can feel more younger than me.

I think that is very special experience and opportunity in my life.

 

My last favorite place in Berkery is local market and old and antique shops

Berkeley bowl is one of local market where has many kinds of vegetables and fruits.milk product so on. They are so fresh and delicious and healthy food.

So I used to go shoping in the market on the weekend. I didn’t like cook before but I became to like cooking by myself in these meterials.

When I go shopping, sometimes I stop by to visit local shops. There are so many beautiful,pretty and antique goods and items. Whenever I get a window shopping I can feel more refresh and happy to see them. I think these shops seem like European shops. They make me being foreign country.

 

I am always thankful that I am in Berkeley in these days. I am so happy,peaceful and free,joyful as well. I just found my spiritual favorite place is Berkeley.

I also give thanks to god about leading my way to this area. I have met really true church and christain church members in Berkeley.

I surely believe that God is making my way and ieading the best way for me.

It means God loves me and I love Jesus in my whole life.

 

Though God’s love changing my personality, mind. thought and lifestyle.

So I trust God, Jesus and Holy spirite forever. Proverbs 16:9 ” In his heart a man plans his course, but the Lord determines his steps.”

I often remind this God’s word when I am here.

I realized that God wants to me very happy where I am in this world also he wants to meet me more closly each other Whenever I am happy and thankful about everything. If I feel more God and Jesus with me, I can live with God and become like Jesus. Give thanks to God being Berkeley.California.US in this time.

Third Writing

Lord determines my step in my life- My favorite places in Bekerley

I have been in California.US about 7 months. I really appreciate being in this State.Because the air is so clean and fresh also the sky is blue and very sunny and beautitul weather. The most people are nice and kind. When they are meeting on the street always saying “Hello~” “Hi~” “How are you?” with smiling.

For the first time, I was really so shy and embarrassed but I was trying to say just like that “Hello~” “Hi~” with smiling. Recently I think that I feel like more comfortabe and enjoy saying “Hello~” to someone.

A months ago, I have moved to Berkeley. My new place is close to UC Berkeley University. There are a lot of international students

like Korean,Chinese.Indian.European.etc I think Berkeley is very open-minded and liberal place so I can feel more free and comfortable also very interested in this area.

I used to get up late in the morning before. I was a sleepyhead in Korea.However I can wake up early in the morning in these days. I love to walk and look around the Berkeley village in the morning. There are so beautiful and gorgeous houses like villas, tall trees and forest,castle hotel,antique and small shops also delicous bakery and town cafe and restaurants in there.

Sometimes I imagine that I am walking in this street in my dream just like movie.

That is my favorite places in Berkeley.California.US.

 

The second my favorite place is Bookstore and Library in this area. There are

a few book store. One of bookstore is Pegasus. It has a lot of and various books.

I have found some books what I want to read so I have bought them.

I really feel very peaceful and calm to be in the bookstore and library

whenever I am in these places. I am pretty sure the books makes me happy

 

I often go to UC Berkeley campus in my free time because I can see many students in there. They are always studying anywhere ilke benches, school cafeteria.cafe,library and on the grass in the campus.

I was so impressed they are using their laptop computer “Apple” for a textbook and doing their homework. So they are so quite and very focused on the computer. Somtimes I imagined in Korea. American students are discussing with classmates and talking about many kinds of theme. But they are very different.

School are changing by the students and the current of the time.

Whenever I do my homwork in this campus I can feel more younger than me.

I think that is very special experience and opportunity in my life.

 

My last favorite place in Berkery is local market and old and antique shops

Berkeley bowl is one of local market where has many kinds of vegetables and fruits.milk product so on. They are so fresh and delicious and healthy food.

So I used to go shoping in the market on the weekend. I didn’t like cook before but I became to like cooking by myself in these meterials.

When I go shopping, sometimes I stop by to visit local shops. There are so many beautiful,pretty and antique goods and items. Whenever I get a window shopping I can feel more refresh and happy to see them. I think these shops seem like European shops. They make me being foreign country.

 

I am always thankful that I am in Berkeley in these days. I am so happy,peaceful and free,joyful as well. I just found my spiritual favorite place is Berkeley.

I also give thanks to god about leading my way to this area. I have met really true church and christain church members in Berkeley.

I surely believe that God is making my way and ieading the best way for me.

It means God loves me and I love Jesus in my whole life.

 

Though God’s love changing my personality, mind. thought and lifestyle.

So I trust God, Jesus and Holy spirite forever. Proverbs 16:9 ” In his heart a man plans his course, but the Lord determines his steps.”

 

Second Writing-Feedback

Lord determines my step in my life- My favorite places in Bekerley

 

I have been in California.US about 7 months. I really appreciate being in this State.Because the air is so clean and fresh also the sky is blue and very sunny and beautitul weather. The most people are nice and kind. When they are meeting on the street always saying “Hello~” “Hi~” “How are you?” with smiling.

For the first time, I was really so shy and embarrassed but I was trying to say just like that “Hello~” “Hi~” with smiling. Recently I think that I feel like more comfortabe and enjoy saying “Hello~” to someone.

 

A months ago, I have moved to Berkeley. My new place is close to UC Berkeley University. There are a lot of international students

like Korean,Chinese.Indian.European.etc I think Berkeley is very open-minded and liberal place so I can feel more free and comfortable also very interested in this area.

 

I used to get up late in the morning before. I was a sleepyhead in Korea.

However I can wake up early in the morning in these days. I love to walk and look around the Berkeley village in the morning. There are so beautiful and gorgeous houses like villas, tall trees and forest,castle hotel,antique and small shops also delicous bakery and town cafe and restaurants in there.

Sometimes I imagine that I am walking in this street in my dream just like movie.

That is my favorite places in Berkeley.California.US.

 

The second my favorite place is Bookstore and Library in this area. There are

a few book store. One of bookstore is Pegasus. It has a lot of and various books.

I have found some books what I want to read so I have bought them.

I really feel very peaceful and calm to be in the bookstore and library

whenever I am in these places. I am pretty sure the books makes me happy

 

I often go to UC Berkeley campus in my free time because I can see many students in there. They are always studying anywhere ilke benches, school cafeteria.cafe,library and on the grass in the campus.

I was so impressed they are using their laptop computer “Apple” for a textbook and doing their homework. So they are so quite and very focused on the computer. Somtimes I imagined in Korea. American students are discussing with classmates and talking about many kinds of theme. But they are very different.

School are changing by the students and the current of the time.

Whenever I do my homwork in this campus I can feel more younger than me.

I think that is very special experience and opportunity in my life.

 

My last favorite place in Berkery is local market and old and antique shops

Berkeley bowl is one of local market where has many kinds of vegetables and fruits.milk product so on. They are so fresh and delicious and healthy food.

So I used to go shoping in the market on the weekend. I didn’t like cook before but I became to like cooking by myself in these meterials.

When I go shopping, sometimes I stop by to visit local shops. There are so many beautiful,pretty and antique goods and items. Whenever I get a window shopping I can feel more refresh and happy to see them. I think these shops seem like European shops. They make me being foreign country.

 

I am always thankful that I am in Berkeley in these days. I am so happy,peaceful and free,joyful as well. I just found my spiritual favorite place is Berkeley.

I also give thanks to god about leading my way to this area. I have met really true church and christain church members in Berkeley.

I surely believe that God is making my way and ieading the best way for me.

It means God loves me and I love Jesus in my whole life.

 

* Correct wrong words and grammar

* You need to explan (relate more detailed God’s plan and your favorite places)

* Use different words and expression-no repeating expression.

* Enjoy in your new favorite places

by Ruh Byung Hee

 

First draft writing

Lord determines my step in my life- My favorite places in Bekerley

 

I have been in California.US about 7 months. I really appreciate being in this State.Because the air is so clean and fresh also the sky is blue and very sunny and beautitul weather. The most people are nice and kind. When they are meeting on the street always saying “Hello~” “Hi~” “How are you?” with smiling.

For the first time, I was really so shy and embarrassed but I was trying to say just like that “Hello~” “Hi~” with smiling. Recently I think that I feel like more comfortabe and enjoy saying “Hello~” to someone.

 

A months ago, I have moved to Berkeley. My new place is close to UC Berkeley University. There are a lot of international students

like Korean,Chinese.Indian.European.etc I think Berkeley is very open-minded and liberal place so I can feel more free and comfortable also very interested in this area.

 

I used to get up late in the morning before. I was a sleepyhead in Korea.

However I can wake up early in the morning in these days. I love to walk and look around the Berkeley village in the morning. There are so beautiful and gorgeous houses like villas, tall trees and forest,castle hotel,antique and small shops also delicous bakery and town cafe and restaurants in there.

Sometimes I imagine that I am walking in this street in my dream just like movie.

That is my favorite places in Berkeley.California.US.

 

The second my favorite place is Bookstore and Library in this area. There are

a few book store. One of bookstore is Pegasus. It has a lot of and various books.

I have found some books what I want to read so I have bought them.

I really feel very peaceful and calm to be in the bookstore and library

whenever I am in these places. I am pretty sure the books makes me happy

 

I often go to UC Berkeley campus in my free time because I can see many students in there. They are always studying anywhere ilke benches, school cafeteria.cafe,library and on the grass in the campus.

I was so impressed they are using their laptop computer “Apple” for a textbook and doing their homework. So they are so quite and very focused on the computer. Somtimes I imagined in Korea. American students are discussing with classmates and talking about many kinds of theme. But they are very different.

School are changing by the students and the current of the time.

Whenever I do my homwork in this campus I can feel more younger than me.

I think that is very special experience and opportunity in my life.

 

My last favorite place in Berkery is local market and old and antique shops

Berkeley bowl is one of local market where has many kinds of vegetables and fruits.milk product so on. They are so fresh and delicious and healthy food.

So I used to go shoping in the market on the weekend. I didn’t like cook before but I became to like cooking by myself in these meterials.

When I go shopping, sometimes I stop by to visit local shops. There are so many beautiful,pretty and antique goods and items. Whenever I get a window shopping I can feel more refresh and happy to see them. I think these shops seem European shops. They make me being foreign country.