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4th Essay – Definition Essay

Final:

“When do you keep secret?”

I believe almost everyone has a secret, though just a small or a big secret.

Secret word is originally from Latin.

Secret is something that is kept or meant to be kept unknown or unseen by others.

Secret can also be something that is not properly understood; can be a mystery, such as secrets of the universe.

Secret can also be a valid but not commonly known or recognized method of achieving or maintaining something, such as the secret of success and the secret of their happy marriage.

 

A big secret can be a serious thing or make something big seriously. A small secret can be something that is not a big deal, or not cause anything. For example, a big secret of North Korea could be creating nuclear power, which was very serious confidential. A small secret could be a hobby, romantic desire, a goal, a surprise, or finances, etc.

 

It could be both positive and negative from keeping secret, depending on situations. Sometimes a secret becomes a lie because it has to be hidden for some reasons. Therefore, the person has to avoid saying the truth in order to keep it secret. Some secrets are kept because of good reasons, while some may cause bad effects. For example, when a groom wants to surprise a bride by hiding a wedding plan can be a positive secret. When a husband is hiding his affair from his wife can be a negative secret.

 

When do you keep secret? I believe secret is not really when someone tells you something and you keep it to yourself, but only if that person asks you not to tell anyone. In this case, it is such person’s secret, so you should keep it secret, not say even to your partners or close ones. For your own secret, you decide when you need to conceal it and when you want to reveal it properly, base on your reasons. Like Jesus, sometimes he kept something secret by telling them with a parable when he realized that some listeners are not proper to know or hard to understand and then he just told everything to his disciples privately. (Mark 4:34)

 

Friend Review:

  1. some grammatical errors
  2. giving examples made it easy to understand
  3. good organization
  4. Not clear conclusion

by Pakpimkarn Booncharn

 

Rewrite:

“When do you keep secret?”

I believe almost everyone has a secret, though just a small or a big secret.

Secret word is originally from Latin.

Secret is something that is kept or meant to be kept unknown or unseen by others.

Secret can also be something that is not properly understood; can be a mystery, such as secrets of the universe.

Secret can also be a valid but not commonly known or recognized method of achieving or maintaining something, such as the secret of success and the secret of their happy marriage.

 

A big secret can be a serious thing or make something big seriously. A small secret can be something that is not a big deal, or not cause anything. For example, a big secret of North Korea could be creating nuclear power, which was very serious confidential. A small secret could be a hobby, romantic desire, a goal, a surprise, or finances, etc.

 

It could be both positive and negative from keeping secret, depending on situations. Sometimes a secret becomes a lie because it has to be hidden for some reasons. Therefore, the person has to avoid saying the truth in order to keep it secret. Some secrets are kept because of good reasons, while some may cause bad effects. For example, when a groom wants to surprise a bride by hiding a wedding plan can be a positive secret. When a husband is hiding his affair from his wife can be a negative secret.

 

When do you keep secret? I believe secret is not really when someone tells you something and you keep it to yourself, but only if that person asks you not to tell anyone. In this case, it is such person’s secret, so you should keep it secret, not say even to your partners or close ones. For your own secret, you decide when you need to conceal it and when you want to reveal it properly, base on your reasons. Like Jesus, sometimes he kept something secret by telling them with a parable when he realized that some listeners are not proper to know or hard to understand and then he just told everything to his disciples privately. (Mark 4:34)

 

First draft:

“When do you keep secret?”

I believe almost everyone has a secret, though just a small or a big secret.

Secret word is originally from Latin.

Secret is something that is kept or meant to be kept unknown or unseen by others.

Secret can also be something that is not properly understood; can be a mystery, such as secrets of universe.

Secret can also be a valid but not commonly known or recognized method of achieving or maintaining something, such as the secret of success and the secret of their happy marriage.

Formerly, secret is the name of a prayer said by a priest in a low voice after the offertory in a Roman Catholic Mass.

 

A big secret can be a serious thing or make something big seriously.

A small secret can be something that is not a big deal, or not cause anything.

For example, a big secret of North Korea could be creating nuclear power, which was very serious confidential. A small secret could be the color of your new jacket which you do not want to say.

 

It is obvious that there are both advantages and disadvantages of keeping secret, depends on situations. Sometimes a secret becomes a lie because it has to be hidden for some reasons. Therefore, the person has to avoid saying the truth in order to keep it secret. Some secrets are kept because of good reasons, while some may cause bad effects.

For example, when a groom wants to surprise a bride by hiding a wedding plan can be a positive secret. When a husband is hiding his affair from his wife can be a negative secret.

 

When do you keep secret? I believe secret is not really when someone tells you something and you keep it to yourself. Only if that person asks you not to tell anyone, so that is secret. In this case, it is such person’s secret, so you should keep it secret, not say even to your partners or close ones. For your own secret, you decide when you need to keep it and when you want to reveal it, base on your reasons. Like Jesus, sometimes he kept something secret by telling them with a parable when he realized that some listeners are not proper to know or hard to understand and then he just told everything to his disciples privately. (Mark 4:34)