first draft
I have been experiencing for 25 years so far.
When I was a child, I did not go to kindergarten and went to a piano school. So there were not many friends.
There were only my friends, brother and sister.
There were no peer friends in the house.
When I was 7 years old, I moved to another area, but I did not know anyone around and no friends. A year later, I went to elementary school and my sister went to kindergarten. I went to school and then I liked playing with my friends.
My friends came to play at my house a lot.
Because there was a game machine at home.
I came to my house about twice a week.
Sometimes I went to the game room and played.
It was a game room mainly to play with friends.
At that time, I went to play near the school or near the house. As I entered junior high school, I was naturally separated from my elementary school friends. It took time to make a new friend. Since middle school is male and female, there are 3 men and 7 women, so my middle school friend could have made deep contact with them for 3 years. So far I have met and contacted my middle school friend. The man’s friendship seems to be really great. I can help you if you have a hard day or a hard day.
So when I was in junior high school, I was playing in the city or going to the karaoke room. And when I was on vacation, I went to play in the valley or ski. When I was a high school student, I realized that everyone was scattered and there were many real people and many people in meeting new people. I went to high school a little far. It took about 40 minutes by bus, and it took about 15 minutes to get to school. So it takes an hour. I was able to go to school safely at 7 o’clock at home.
I went to a vocational high school. There were a lot of things in high school. In the first grade, he was elected as a member of the book council and had various experiences. There are many things such as vocational la carte, civil engineering, forklift, automobile disassembly, combination, environment and so on.
I have experienced everything in the first grade and I will choose it during the second grade. I chose the Civil Engineering Department. But now that I think about it, I felt I made the wrong choice. If you choose to cook, you will have more knowledge of cooking and more experience. But I do not regret much. Because I made a choice. So when I was in high school, I had a love affair for the first time, got a junior, went to play late at night, and ate my father for the first time. And I learned to drink from my father’s house with my junior high school friends. Sometimes friends came to my house and ate together.
I went to university, but the university was a new world. The real school was big, there were many people, and there was a lot of overwork.
I went to a cookery department, but I was going to take a freshman, and I asked him to assemble it. If you are an oti mite, you will not be able to drink properly and drink a lot. Since I came to the army, there was no catching of the war, and I just played with each other and changed a lot. The system of teaching changed and the building changed so it was not good when we returned to adaptation. I had a lot of experience while going to college and doing alba, drinking and going to college. I got a job, but my social life was much harder than I thought. It was a company that the youngest man should be able to see. Well, there was a school boat. At first I started to work with them, sharing stories and helping each other.
revise
Father, I ate drunk.ㅡMy father learned a drink.
I learned to drink from my father’s house with my junior high school friends.
ㅡI learned to drink at my father’s house with my junior high school friends.
second draft
I have been experiencing for 25 years so far.
When I was a child, I did not go to kindergarten and went to a piano school. So there were not many friends.
There were only my friends, brother and sister.
There were no peer friends in the house.
When I was 7 years old, I moved to another area, but I did not know anyone around and no friends. A year later, I went to elementary school and my sister went to kindergarten. I went to school and then I liked playing with my friends.
My friends came to play at my house a lot.
Because there was a game machine at home.
I came to my house about twice a week.
Sometimes I went to the game room and played.
It was a game room mainly to play with friends.
At that time, I went to play near the school or near the house. As I entered junior high school, I was naturally separated from my elementary school friends. It took time to make a new friend. Since middle school is male and female, there are 3 men and 7 women, so my middle school friend could have made deep contact with them for 3 years.
So far I have met and contacted my middle school friend. The man’s friendship seems to be really great. I can help you if you have a hard day or a hard day.
I have been experiencing for 25 years so far.
When I was a child, I did not go to kindergarten and went to a piano school. So there were not many friends.
There were only my friends, brother and sister.
There were no peer friends in the house.
When I was 7 years old, I moved to another area, but I did not know anyone around and no friends. A year later, I went to elementary school and my sister went to kindergarten. I went to school and then I liked playing with my friends.
My friends came to play at my house a lot.
Because there was a game machine at home.
I came to my house about twice a week.
Sometimes I went to the game room and played.
It was a game room mainly to play with friends.
At that time, I went to play near the school or near the house. As I entered junior high school, I was naturally separated from my elementary school friends. It took time to make a new friend. Since middle school is male and female, there are 3 men and 7 women, so my middle school friend could have made deep contact with them for 3 years.
So far I have met and contacted my middle school friend. The man’s friendship seems to be really great. I can help you if you have a hard day or a hard day.
I went to university, but the university was a new world.
The real school was big, there were many people, and there was a lot of overwork.
I went to a cookery department, but I was going to take a freshman, and I asked him to assemble it. If you are an oti mite, you will not be able to drink properly and drink a lot. Since I came to the army, there was no catching of the war, and I just played with each other and changed a lot. The system of teaching changed and the building changed so it was not good when we returned to adaptation. I had a lot of experience while going to college and doing alba, drinking and going to college. I went into the club with my friends, but I went into the baking club.
One of my friends was president and I was in charge of the secretary. As I was late, I did not have many people. One year or so later, we retreated, and our juniors retreated and continued to keep the club. I got a job, but my social life was much harder than I thought. It was a company that the youngest man should be able to see. Well, there was a school boat. At first I started to work with them, sharing stories and helping each other.
final draft
I have been experiencing for 25 years so far.
When I was a child, I did not go to kindergarten and went to a piano school. So there were not many friends.
There were only my friends, brother and sister.
There were no peer friends in the house.
When I was 7 years old, I moved to another area, but I did not know anyone around and no friends. A year later, I went to elementary school and my sister went to kindergarten. I went to school and then I liked playing with my friends.
My friends came to play at my house a lot.
Because there was a game machine at home.
I came to my house about twice a week.
Sometimes I went to the game room and played.
It was a game room mainly to play with friends.
At that time, I went to play near the school or near the house. As I entered junior high school, I was naturally separated from my elementary school friends. It took time to make a new friend. Since middle school is male and female, there are 3 men and 7 women, so my middle school friend could have made deep contact with them for 3 years.
So far I have met and contacted my middle school friend. The man’s friendship seems to be really great. I can help you if you have a hard day or a hard day.
So when I was in junior high school, I was playing in the city or going to the karaoke room. And when I was on vacation, I went to play in the valley or ski. When I was a high school student, I realized that everyone was scattered and there were many real people and many people in meeting new people. I went to high school a little far. It took about 40 minutes by bus, and it took about 15 minutes to get to school. So it takes an hour. I was able to go to school safely at 7 o’clock at home.
I went to a vocational high school. There were a lot of things in high school. In the first grade, he was elected as a member of the book council and had various experiences. There are many things such as vocational la carte, civil engineering, forklift, automobile disassembly, combination, environment and so on.
I have experienced everything in the first grade and I will choose it during the second grade. I chose the Civil Engineering Department. But now that I think about it, I felt I made the wrong choice. If you choose to cook, you will have more knowledge of cooking and more experience. But I do not regret much. Because I made a choice. So, when I was in high school, I got a love affair for the first time, got a junior, went to play late at night, and learned my first dad’s drink. I learned to drink at my father’s house with my middle school students. Sometimes friends came to my house and ate together.
I enrolled in a university, but the real school was big, there were many people, and there was a lot of work.
I went to a cookery department, but I was going to take a freshman, and I asked him to assemble it. Oti, if you are empty, you can not drink properly and drink a lot. I did not even play on the day of the festival and I did the work. My grandmother played and said that our freshmen wanted to play but could not play and so it was unfortunate. Since I came to the army, there was no catching of the war, and I just played with each other and changed a lot. The system of teaching changed and the building changed so it was not good when we returned to adaptation. I had a lot of experience while going to college and doing alba, drinking and going to college. I went into the club with my friends, but I went into the baking club.
One of my friends was president and I was in charge of the secretary. As I was late, I did not have many people. One year or so later, we retreated, and our juniors retreated and continued to keep the club. I got a job, but my social life was much harder than I thought. It was a company that the youngest man should be able to see. Well, there was a school boat. At first I started to work with them, sharing stories and helping each other.
I was half-mooned and I was in good condition for another company and I came back to work. I was surprised to see that the environment was different and the freshmen were like my brother and my family. They worked together to help each other.
Final Exam | Possible | Score | Kim, Sangwon |
Formatting | 10 | o | |
Writing Process | 20 | 10 | |
Topic Choice | 10 | 5 | |
Grammar | 10 | 5 | |
Total | 20 |