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Final draft.

Process essay style.

How will you make the world better place?

 

What wrong with the World?

Today, we always see the violent NEWS from television, newspaper or we can meet the awful experience by ourselves. Violence, crime, discrimination or corruption matters appear across the World. Social status cannot evaluate human moral. Even though, they are very rich, people still commit the unethical matters when they have a chance. People start fighting each other because of self interest. Wars happen everywhere. In my opinion, the religious is the most powerful method to prevent the World.

#against the war.

Can we change the World?

My goal is not to be the world leader. In my opinion, we can start changing the world by improve ourselves. We must remind ourselves to shame when doing thing unethically. I think we should keep doing the right thing, avoiding the immoral matters and the most important thing is controlling you thought. There is the quote that say “You are what you think”. If you have the right concept in your head, it will be related to your personality. We should start changing from ourselves then we will share the positive attitude to people that close to you such as family, friends and colleagues. Another way to improve our society is keeping an eye on the bad things. Don’t ignore the unethical matters. Report the illegal behavior to people who have authority. I think we can do it.

# keep improving yourself.

How can I make the world better place?

I have a plan to do. There are 4 steps to make the world better.

 

Step 1 rebuilding the pattern of my thought.

I will create the positive attitude and get more useful information. I should read more many books and listen to the advice of successful people. Moreover, I should learn to solve the problem not to blame others. Additionally, I have to find the opportunity rather than wait for the destiny. I must keep the passion and setting the clear goal. I think if I stay focusing on my goal, I will change the world better place in one day.

 

Step 2 finding the good partners.

I can do everything by myself but it must be a lot better when I have the partners. Selecting the good partners is very important. The resources and time are limited. To achieve the goal in the short period of time is needed the helpers. The good partners should share the same direction. They should have the same morality level as me or above. To prevent the unnecessary argument, teamwork is the key factor. Good communication is the better way to increase the chance of success. Talking and listening make us more understanding each other.

 

Step 3 achieving the authority.

Unfortunately, if I have the strong passion but no one listen to me because I am an unknown person. I have to earn the reputation and authority. Education is the basic foundation to public acception. Higher education is easier to convince people. Career is the other key factor to connect people. Teacher, doctor or actor can convince people to listen to you easier than other careers. For me, I would like to be a teacher in order to  build the school for children.

 

Step 4 creating the good community.

I want to build up the good community by founding the school. I believe that’s children are our future. I must to be the good example for my students. Everything I know, I will pass down to the students. After that, I just let them grow by themselves. I believe more than half of my students may grow up as good citizens.

#they are our future.

 

It is like Jesus, Jesus teaches his disciples and people but he doesn’t expect that all people should follow him. Jesus completes his duty and let the people think and decide their destination.

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Friend review and comment.

  1. You must aware when using the gerund to form the complete sentence.
  2. You should use the synonym when you write story in the same paragraph.
  3. Your grammar is improve when I compare to the first time.
  4. Your writing is easy to read and reasonable.

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Second draft.

Process essay style.

How will you make the world better place?

 

What wrong with the World?

Today, we always see the violent NEWS from television, newspaper or we can meet the awful experience by ourselves. Violence, crime, discrimination or corruption matters appear across the World. Social status cannot evaluate human moral. Even though, they are very rich, people still commit the unethical matters when they have a chance. People start fighting each other because of self interest. Wars happen everywhere. Unfortunately, religious, the most powerful tool cannot prevent the world. What should we do?

 

Can we change the World?

My goal is not to be the world leader. In my opinion, we can start changing the world by improve ourselves. We must remind ourselves to shame when doing thing unethically. I think we should keep doing the right thing, avoiding the immoral matters and the most important thing is controlling you thought. There is the quote that say “You are what you think”. If you have the right concept in your head, it will be related to your personality. Starting from ourselves then sharing the positive attitude to people that close to you such as family, friends and colleagues. Another way to improve our society is keeping an eye on the bad things. Don’t ignore the unethical matters. Report the illegal behavior to people who have authority. I think we can do it.

 

How can I make the world better place?

I have a plan to do. I have 4 steps to make the world better.

 

Step 1 rebuilding the pattern of my thought.

I will create the positive attitude and get more useful information. Reading many books and listening to the advice of successful people. Learning to solve the problem not to blame others. Finding the opportunity rather than waiting for the destiny. Keeping the passion and setting the clear goal. I think if I stay focusing on my goal, I will change the world better place in one day.

 

Step 2 finding the good partners.

I can do everything by myself but it must be a lot better when I have the partners. Selecting the good partners is very important. The resources and time are limited. To achieve the goal in the short period of time is needed the helpers. The good partners should share the same direction. They should have the same morality level as me or above. To prevent the unnecessary argument, teamwork is the key factor. Good communication is the better way to increase the chance of success. Talking and listening make us more understanding each other.

 

Step 3 achieving the authority.

Unfortunately, if I have the strong passion but no one listen to me because I am an unknown person. I have to earn the reputation and authority. Education is the basic foundation to public acception. Higher education is easier to convince people. Career is the other key factor to connect people. Teacher, doctor or actor can convince people to listen to you easier than other careers. For me, I would like to be a teacher in order to  build the school for children.

 

Step 4 creating the good community.

I want to build up the good community by founding the school. I believe that’s children are our future. I must to be the good example for my students. Everything I know, I will pass down to the students. After that, I just let them grow by themselves. I believe more than half of my students may grow up as good citizens.

 

It is like Jesus, Jesus teaches his disciples and people but he doesn’t expect that all people should follow him. Jesus completes his duty and let the people think and decide their destination.

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First draft.

Process essay style.

How will you make the world better place?

 

What wrong?

Now a day, we watch the bad NEWS from television, newspaper or we can meet the bad experiences by ourselves. Violent, criminal, discrimination or corruption matters appear across the Earth. Social status cannot evaluate human morality. Even though, they are very rich, people still commit the unethical matters when they have a chance. People start fighting each other because of self interested. Wars happen everywhere. What should we do?

 

Can we change?

My goal is not to be a world leader. In my opinion, we can start changing the world by improve ourselves. We should remind ourselves to shame when doing the thing unethically. I think we should keep doing the right thing, avoiding the immoral matters and the most important thing is controlling you thought. There is the quote that say “You are what you think”. If you have the wrong concept in your head, it will be related to your personality. Starting from ourselves then sharing the positive attitude to people that close to you like family, closed friends and colleagues. Another way to improve our society is keeping eye on the bad things. Don’t ignore the unethical matters. Report the illegal behavior to people who have authority. I think we can do it.

 

How can I make the world better place?

I have a plan to do. I have 4 steps to make the world better.

 

Step 1 rebuilding the pattern of my thought.

I will create the positive attitude and get more useful information. Reading many books and listening to the advice of successful people. Learning to solve the problem not to blame others. Finding the opportunity not to waiting the destiny. Keeping the passion and setting the clear goal. I think if I focus on my goal, I will change the world better.

 

Step 2 finding the partners.

I can do everything by myself but it must be a lot better when I have the partners. Selecting the good partners is very important. The resources and time are limited. To achieve the goal in the short period of time is needed the helpers. The good partners should have the same direction as me. They should have the same morality level as me or above. To prevent the unnecessary argument, teamwork is the key factor. Good communication is the better way to increase the chance of success. Talking and listening make we more understanding each other.

 

Step 3 achieving the authority.

Unfortunately, if I have the strong passion but no one doesn’t listen to me because I am the unknown person. I have to get the reputation and authority. Education is the basic foundation to public acception. Higher education is easier to convince people. Career is the other key factor to connect people. Teacher, doctor or actor can convince people to listen to you easier than other careers. For me, I would like to be a teacher and build the school for our children.

 

Step 4 creating the community.

I want to build up the good community by founding the school. I believe that the children are our the world future. I must to be the good example for my students. Everything I know, I will pass down to the students. After that, I just let them grow by themselves. I believe more than half of my students may grow up as good citizens.

 

It is like Jesus, Jesus teaches his disciples and people but he doesn’t expect that all people should follow him. Jesus completes his duty and let the people think and decide their destination.