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Final Draft Genghis Khan

Genghis Khan portrait.

The begining of the story.

First of all, I know that he has an excellent leader for Mongolian people. I heard about him from the movie. I watched the Genghis Khan movie since I was young. Moreover, I have a chance to choose the character who is in between 350AD – 1500AD. I found that he was in this range of the history. I’m surprise when I start reading about his history. I can’t imagine who come the kid who was born in the border of the Mongolia would lead the people in the future. But he’s smart and intelligence differentiate among other great warrior.

The history of Genghis Khan

Temujin is name of the Genghis Khan. Genghis Khan was probably born in 1162 in Deluun Boldog, In northern Mongolia, the area that close to the capital Ulaanbaatar. Reference from the mongkol secret report of the history. He was born with grasping in a blood clot on his fist. That was a sign he was destined to become a great leader. He was the second son of his father Yesugei who was a Kiyad chief. He was the prominent in the Khamag Mongkol confederation, an ally of Toghrul relate to the Keraite tribe. He grew up from interesting observation. He was in the tough political climate, including tribal warfare, thievery, raids, corruption, and revenge between confederations, compounded by interference from abroad such as from China to the south. Genghis Khan mother Hoelun taught him many lessons. He obtain how to learn to be strong alliances to ensure stability from his mom in Mongolia. What I like about him is, he didn’t try to force the military to expand his power. On the other hand, he was offering himself as an ally when he attempted early empower. But he also had a conflict between him and his childhood who is Jamukha.

The picture show the Genghis Khan when he was 40years old.

Jamukha become Khan of his own tribe, the Jadaran. Due to, the politic started beginning consolidating power, and they became rivals. He supported the Mongolian aristocracy. Meanwhile, Genghis Khan went with a meritocratic method, and he attracted a broader range and lower class of followers. Jamukha started attacting Genghis Khan with 30,000armys. But he didn’t make it through. It was unclear that Temujin life after 10years, he was silent and disappear in this period. In year 1197, he returns to command of the part of war. he and Toghrul were restored by the Jin to positions of power.

In year of 1200, the Mongol confederation rivals In his rule and his conquest of his tribes. It had something that was really interesting. He broke with Mongol tradition in a few crucial ways. He delegated authority based on merit and loyalty rather than family ties. On the other hand, the incentive of obedience and the Yassa code of law. Genghis Khan promised civilians and soldiers from the war. If he defeated rival tribes, he did not drive away their soldiers and abandon their civilians. On the other hand, he took the conquered tribe under his protection and integrated its members into his own tribe. He would also have his mother adopt orphans from the conquered tribe, bringing them into his family. These political innovations inspired great loyalty among the conquered people, making Genghis Khan stronger with each victory. Therefore, he conquered his army with power and greatness. It ’s critical about the leader who would lead the big army. How could he convince them to follow along with his will. As a result, by 1206, Genghis Khan had managed to unite or subdue the Merkits, Naimans, Mongols, Keraites, Tatars, Uyghurs, and other disparate smaller tribes under his rule. This was a monumental feat. It resulted in peace between previously war. and a single political and military force. The union became known as the Mongols.

The end of Genghis Khan and mystery of his dead.

This is the portrait when he’s going to the war.

Genghis Khan died in August 1227, he exact cause of his death remains a mystery, and he is being killed in action against the Western Xia, illness, falling from his horse, or wounds sustained in hunting or battle. Someone said Genghis Khan fell from his horse while hunting and died because of the injury. He was already old and tired from his journeys. Some people said that he got an infection from the arrow wound he received during his final campaign. His dead was in the mystery. But the interesting things was when he was alive. He won’t let anyone one draws his picture or capture his portrait. He didn’t want anyone to recognize him. Even though, he expands his conquer but Genghis Khan did not conquer the whole area of the eventual Mongol Empire.

At the time of his death in 1227, the empire stretched from the Caspian Sea to the Sea of Japan. Its expansion continued for one or more generations. Under Genghis’s successor Ogediei speed of expansion reached its peak. Mongol armies pushed into Persia, finished off the Western Xia of the Khwarezmids, his conquered clashed with the imperial Song dynasty of China, and eventually, he took control of all of China in 1279. They also pushed further into Russia and eastern Europe. One things that is true about Gengkis Khan, he’s not only the warrior to fight to get what they want. On the other hand, he build the relationship among the people who can he trust moreover, he obtain how to learn to live in politic scheme. That would be one of the greatest leader and warrior among Mongkol.

Friend Review from Yohko

Hi Pardol,

First of all, I really like how detailed you wrote the story of Genghis Khan’s life. I especially liked the part where you added a little mystery to it about how no one knows the reason for his death. Maybe you can add something about if it is true or not or if you agree or disagree.

Rewrite Genghis Khan.

First of all, I know that he has an excellent leader for Mongolian people. I heard about him from the movie. I watched the Genghis Khan movie since I was young. Moreover, I have a chance to choose the character who is in between 350AD – 1500AD. I found that he was in this range of the history. I’m surprise when I start reading about his history. I can’t imagine who come the kid who was born in the border of the Mongolia would lead the people in the future. But he’s smart and intelligence differentiate than the other people.

Genghis Khan’s birth name, Temüjin. Genghis Khan was probably born in 1162 in Deluun Boldog, In modern-day northern Mongolia, close to the current capital Ulaanbaatar. The Secret History of the Mongols reports that Temujin was born grasping a blood clot in his fist, a traditional sign that he was destined to become a great leader. He was the second son of his father Yesugei who was a Kiyad chief prominent in the Khamag Mongkol confederation and an ally of Toghrul of the Keraite tribe. He grew up from observing the tough political climate, which included tribal warfare, thievery, raids, corruption, and revenge between confederations, compounded by interference from abroad such as from China to the south. Temujin’s mother Hoelun taught him many lessons, especially the need for strong alliances to ensure stability in Mongolia. What I like about him is, he didn’t try to force the military to expand his power. On the other hand, he was offering himself as an ally when he attempted early empower. But he also had a conflict between him and his childhood who is Jamukha. Jamukha become Khan of his own tribe, the Jadaran. According to, the politic each began consolidating power, and they became rivals. Jamukha supported the traditional Mongolian aristocracy, while Temujin followed a meritocratic method, and attracted a broader range and lower class of followers. Jamikha attached Temujin with 30,000troops. But he didn’t make it through. It was unclear that Temujin life after 10years, he was silent in this period. Around the year 1197, he returns to command of the part of war. he and Toghrul were restored by the Jin to positions of power.

Around1200, the main rivals of the Mongol confederation, In his rule and his conquest of rival tribes, Temujin broke with Mongol tradition in a few crucial ways. He delegated authority based on merit and loyalty, rather than family ties. As an incentive for absolute obedience and the Yassa code of law, Temujin promised civilians and soldiers wealth from future war spoils. When he defeated rival tribes, he did not drive away their soldiers and abandon their civilians. Instead, he took the conquered tribe under his protection and integrated its members into his own tribe. He would even have his mother adopt orphans from the conquered tribe, bringing them into his family. These political innovations inspired great loyalty among the conquered people, making Temujin stronger with each victory. Therefore, he conquered tribe with power and royalty. It’s really critical about the leadership who would lead the big army. How could he convince them to follow along with his will. As a result, by 1206, Genghis Khan had managed to unite or subdue the Merkits, Naimans, Mongols, Keraites, Tatars, Uyghurs, and other disparate smaller tribes under his rule. This was a monumental feat. It resulted in peace between previously warring tribes, and a single political and military force. The union became known as the Mongols.

Genghis Khan died in August 1227, he exact cause of his death remains a mystery, and is variously attributed to being killed in action against the Western Xia, illness, falling from his horse, or wounds sustained in hunting or battle. Someone said Genghis Khan fell from his horse while hunting and died because of the injury. He was already old and tired from his journeys. Some people said that he got an infection from the arrow wound he received during his final campaign. His dead was in the mystery. But the interesting things was when he was alive. He won’t let anyone one draws his picture or capture his portrait. He didn’t want anyone to recognize him. Even though, he expands his conquer but Genghis Khan did not conquer the whole area of the eventual Mongol Empire.

At the time of his death in 1227, the empire stretched from the Caspian Sea to the Sea of Japan. Its expansion continued for one or more generations. Under Genghis’s successor Ogediei speed of expansion reached its peak. Mongol armies pushed into Persia, finished off the Western Xia of the Khwarezmids, his conquered clashed with the imperial Song dynasty of China, and eventually, he took control of all of China in 1279. They also pushed further into Russia and eastern Europe.

Draft Genghis Khan

First of all, I know that he has an excellent leader for Mongolian people. I heard about him from the movie. I watched the Genghis Khan movie since I was young. Moreover, I have a chance to choose the character who is in between 350AD – 1500AD. I found that he was in this range of the history. I’m surprise when I start reading about his history. I can’t imagine who come the kid who was born in the border of the Mongolia would lead the people in the future. But he’s smart and intelligence differentiate than the other people.

Genghis Khan’s birth name, Temüjin. Genghis Khan was probably born in 1162 in Deluun Boldog, In modern-day northern Mongolia, close to the current capital Ulaanbaatar. The Secret History of the Mogols reports that Temujin was born grasping a blood clot in his fist, a traditional sign that he was destined to become a great leader. He was the second son of his father Yesugei who was a Kiyad chief prominent in the Khamag Mongol confederation and an ally of Toghrul of the Keraite tribe. He grew up from observing the tough political climate, which included tribal warfare, thievery, raids, corruption, and revenge between confederations, compounded by interference from abroad such as from China to the south. Temujin’s mother Hoelun taught him many lessons, especially the need for strong alliances to ensure stability in Mongolia. What I like about him is, he didn’t try to force the military to expand his power. On the other hand, he was offering himself as an ally when he attempted early empower. But he also had a conflict between him and his childhood who is Jamukha. Jamukha become Khan of his own tribe, the Jadaran. According to, the politic each began consolidating power, and they became rivals. Jamukha supported the traditional Mongolian aristocracy, while Temujin followed a meritocratic method, and attracted a broader range and lower class of followers. Jamikha attached Temujin with 30,000troops. But he didn’t make it through. It was unclear that Temujin life after 10years, he was silent in this period. Around the year 1197, he returns to command of the part of war. he and Toghrul were restored by the Jin to positions of power.

Around1200, the main rivals of the Mongol confederation, In his rule and his conquest of rival tribes, Temujin broke with Mongol tradition in a few crucial ways. He delegated authority based on merit and loyalty, rather than family ties. As an incentive for absolute obedience and the Yassa code of law, Temujin promised civilians and soldiers wealth from future war spoils. When he defeated rival tribes, he did not drive away their soldiers and abandon their civilians. Instead, he took the conquered tribe under his protection and integrated its members into his own tribe. He would even have his mother adopt orphans from the conquered tribe, bringing them into his family. These political innovations inspired great loyalty among the conquered people, making Temujin stronger with each victory. Therefore, he conquered tribe with power and royalty. It’s really critical about the leadership who would lead the big army. How could he convince them to follow along with his will. As a result, by 1206, Genghis Khan had managed to unite or subdue the Merkits, Naimans, Mongols, Keraites, Tatars, Uyghurs, and other disparate smaller tribes under his rule. This was a monumental feat. It resulted in peace between previously warring tribes, and a single political and military force. The union became known as the Mongols.

Genghis Khan died in August 1227, he exact cause of his death remains a mystery, and is variously attributed to being killed in action against the Western Xia, illness, falling from his horse, or wounds sustained in hunting or battle. Someone said Genghis Khan fell from his horse while hunting and died because of the injury. He was already old and tired from his journeys. Some people said that he got an infection from the arrow wound he received during his final campaign. His dead was in the mystery. But the interesting things was when he was alive. He won’t let anyone one draws his picture or capture his portrait. He didn’t want anyone to recognize him. Even though, he expands his conquer but Genghis Khan did not conquer the whole area of the eventual Mongol Empire.

At the time of his death in 1227, the empire stretched from the Caspian Sea to the Sea of Japan. Its expansion continued for one or more generations. Under Genghis’s successor Ogediei speed of expansion reached its peak. Mongol armies pushed into Persia, finished off the Western Xia of the Khwarezmids, his conquered clashed with the imperial Song dynasty of China, and eventually, he took control of all of China in 1279. They also pushed into Russia and Eastern Europe.

Final Exam Possible Score Sawatdee, Pardol
Formatting 10 5
Writing Process 20 20
Topic Choice 10 5
Grammar 10 5
Total 35