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The important things in my life that make me successful.

 

Success is the goal you want to be reach, but how to reach the goal. I believe that everyone wants to be success in life. Whether it is personal life or work. Most people will measure success in the amount of money. That someone has a lot of money there are successful. Money is a factor in the way people live today. It’s not measure of whether your success in life. Some people make a lot of money but not happy in life. And some people who don’t have money too much but happy in their life.

Each person has a different goal in life, so each success is different. Some people focus on money that you got it. It will be used as a measure of success. But for me successful are money, healthy and family. So no matter how I get a lot of money but I’m alone no one around me and I’m unhealthy. There are important things that I want to be success.

Money: I thought, everyone would like to have a lot of money. Why money is important in my life because I have to use a money in daily as buy food, car, house, travel and when I’m sick etc.

Everything I have to use a money. That’s a reason I’m work to make money. “All human work, however complicated or simple is made possible by the operations of the Spirit of God in the working person; and all work whose nature and results reflect the values of the new creations is accomplished under the instruction and inspiration of The Spirit of God.” If you work hard enough, you can be anything you want. When you get money rethink how to use your money in daily and save for the future. Don’t forget to spent your money help the people who have no chance or victim. Like Jesus said “Go, sell everything you have in this world, give it all to the poor, and you’ll have treasure in the heavenly world. Then come, follow me”. It’s means, you will feel happy when you help another people who doesn’t have a chance.

Healthy: if you unhealthy, it’s no matter you have a lot of money because you have to waste your money to treat your illness. So you have to take care of yourself. You could be abstaining from drugs or alcohol and do exercise daily. I’m a smoker but now I’m try to quit smoking because smoking will damage my health. “Don’t you realize that your body is the temple of the holy spirit, who lives in you and was given to you by God. You do not belong to yourself, 20 for God bought you with a high price, so you must honor God with your body.”

Family: Our relationships are the most important things. There ‘re the most crucial factor for happiness. Family is at the top of the list in everyone life. Sometimes, it’s easy to forget just how much family means to us. But when you got a problem, your family is the first person who always beside you. Nowadays you hard working, no time to take care your parent. No time to take your parent to eat or travel. You think that your parent can waiting for you but if you rethink your parent will get older and their body will in poor health. So take care your parent while they can eat and go to travel with you.  “ I can do all things through him who strengthens me” Philippians 4:13

If you want to be success, do not forget the important things in your life. You will be able to accomplish everything on your own. Successful must be happy, it doesn’t depend on how much money. It’s depend on you have enough money, you can take care your parent and you have a good health. If you miss somethings on these I think, you’re not success.

 

 

 

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The important things in my life that make me successful.

Success is the goal you want to be reach, but how to reach the goal. I believe that everyone wants to be success in life. Whether it is personal life or work. Most people will measure success in the amount of money. That someone has a lot of money there are successful. Money is a factor in the way people live today. It’s not measure of whether your success in life. Some people make a lot of money but not happy in life. And some people who don’t have money too much but happy in their life. In our lives, we want more money, we want more time and we want a bigger house or a nicer car. There is nothing wrong, but mistakenly assume that to have these thing is to be successful.

Each person has a different goal in life, so each success is different. Some people focus on money that you got it. It will be used as a measure of success. But for me successful are money, healthy and family. So no matter how I get a lot of money but I’m alone no one around me and I’m unhealthy. There are important things that I want to be success.

Money: I thought, everyone would like to have a lot of money. Why money is important in my life because I have to use a money in daily as buy food, car, house, travel and when I’m sick etc.

Everything I have to use a money. That’s a reason I’m work to make money. “All human work, however complicated or simple is made possible by the operations of the Spirit of God in the working person; and all work whose nature and results reflect the values of the new creations is accomplished under the instruction and inspiration of The Spirit of God.” If you work hard enough, you can be anything you want. When you get money rethink how to use your money in daily and save for the future. Don’t forget to spent your money help the people who have no chance or victim. Like Jesus said “Go, sell everything you have in this world, give it all to the poor, and you’ll have treasure in the heavenly world. Then come, follow me”. It’s means, you will feel happy when you help another people who doesn’t have a chance.

Healthy: if you unhealthy, it’s no matter you have a lot of money because you have to waste your money to treat your illness. So you have to take care of yourself. You could be abstaining from drugs or alcohol and do exercise daily. I’m a smoker but now I’m try to quit smoking because smoking will damage my health. “Don’t you realize that your body is the temple of the holy spirit, who lives in you and was given to you by God. You do not belong to yourself, 20 for God bought you with a high price, so you must honor God with your body.”

Family: Our relationships are the most important things. There ‘re the most crucial factor for happiness. Family is at the top of the list in everyone life. Sometimes, it’s easy to forget just how much family means to us. But when you got a problem, your family is the first person who always beside you. The family in image of God “ A family begins with a man and a woman, each created in God’s image” (Genesis 1:27) for me this sentence means everybody was born by your mother and father. Nowadays you hard working, no time to take care your parent. No time to take your parent to eat or travel. You think that your parent can waiting for you but if you rethink your parent will get older and their body will in poor health. So take care your parent while they can eat and go to travel with you.  “ I can do all things through him who strengthens me” Philippians 4:13

If you want to be success, do not forget the important things in your life. You will be able to accomplish everything on your own. Successful must be happy, it doesn’t depend on how much money. It’s depend on you have enough money, you can take care your parent and you have a good health. If you miss somethings on these I think, you’re not success.

 

Second Draft:

 

The important things in my life that make me successful.

Success is the goal you want to be reach, but how to reach the goal. I believe that everyone wants to be success in life. Whether it is personal life or work. Most people will measure success in the amount of money. That someone has a lot of money there are successful. Money is a factor in the way people live today. It’s not measure of whether your success in life. Some people make a lot of money but not happy in life. And some people who don’t have money too much but happy in their life. In our lives, we want more money, we want more time and we want a bigger house or a nicer car. There is nothing wrong, but mistakenly assume that to have these thing is to be successful.

Each person has a different goal in life, so each success is different. Some people focus on money that you got it. It will be used as a measure of success. But for me successful are money, healthy and family. So no matter how I get a lot of money but I’m alone no one around me and I’m unhealthy. There are important things that I want to be success.

Money: I thought, everyone would like to have a lot of money. Why money is important in my life because I have to use a money in daily as buy food, car, house, travel and when I’m sick etc.

Everything I have to use a money. That’s a reason I’m work to make money. “All human work, however complicated or simple is made possible by the operations of the Spirit of God in the working person; and all work whose nature and results reflect the values of the new creations is accomplished under the instruction and inspiration of The Spirit of God.” If you work hard enough, you can be anything you want. When you get money rethink how to use your money in daily and save for the future.

Healthy: if you unhealthy, it’s no matter you have a lot of money because you have to waste your money to treat your illness. So you have to take care of yourself. You could be abstaining from drugs or alcohol and do exercise daily. I’m a smoker but now I’m try to quit smoking because smoking will damage my health. “Don’t you realize that your body is the temple of the holy spirit, who lives in you and was given to you by God. You do not belong to yourself, 20 for God bought you with a high price, so you must honor God with your body.”

Family: Our relationships are the most important things. There ‘re the most crucial factor for happiness. Family is at the top of the list in everyone life. Sometimes, it’s easy to forget just how much family means to us. But when you got a problem, your family is the first person who always beside you. The family in image of God “ A family begins with a man and a woman, each created in God’s image” (Genesis 1:27) for me this sentence means everybody was born by your mother and father. Nowadays you hard working, no time to take care your parent. No time to take your parent to eat or travel. You think that your parent can waiting for you but if you rethink your parent will get older and their body will in poor health. So take care your parent while they can eat and go to travel with you.  “ I can do all things through him who strengthens me” Philippians 4:13

If you want to be success, do not forget the important things in your life. You will be able to accomplish everything on your own. Successful must be happy, it doesn’t depend on how much money. It’s depend on you have enough money, you can take care your parent and you have a good health. If you miss somethings on these I think, you’re not success.

 

First Draft:

 

The important things in my life that make me successful.

Success is the goal you want to be reach, but how to reach the goal. I believe that everyone wants to be success in life. Whether it is personal life or work. Most people will measure success in the amount of money. That someone has a lot of money there are successful. Money is a factor in the way people live today. It’s not measure of whether your success in life. Some people make a lot of money but not happy in life. And some people who don’t have money too much but happy in their life. In our lives, we want more money, we want more time and we want a bigger house or a nicer car. There is nothing wrong, but mistakenly assume that to have these thing is to be successful.

Each person has a different goal in life, so each success is different. Some people focus on money that you got it. It will be used as a measure of success. But for me successful are money, healthy and family. So no matter how I get a lot of money but I’m alone no one around me and I’m unhealthy. There are important things that I want to be success.

Money: I thought, everyone would like to have a lot of money. Why money is important in my life because I have to use a money in daily as buy food, car, house, travel and when I’m sick etc.

Everything I have to use a money. That’s a reason I’m work to make money. “All human work, however complicated or simple is made possible by the operations of the Spirit of God in the working person; and all work whose nature and results reflect the values of the new creations is accomplished under the instruction and inspiration of The Spirit of God.” If you work hard enough, you can be anything you want. When you get money rethink how to use your money in daily and save for the future.

Healthy: if you unhealthy, it’s no matter you have a lot of money because you have to waste your money to treat your illness. So you have to take care of yourself. You could be abstaining from drugs or alcohol and do exercise daily. I’m a smoker but now I’m try to quit smoking because smoking will damage my health. “Don’t you realize that your body is the temple of the holy spirit, who lives in you and was given to you by God. You do not belong to yourself, 20 for God bought you with a high price, so you must honor God with your body.”

Family: Our relationships are the most important things. There ‘re the most crucial factor for happiness. Family is at the top of the list in everyone life. Sometimes, it’s easy to forget just how much family means to us. But when you got a problem, your family is the first person who always beside you. Nowadays you hard working, no time to take care your parent. No time to take your parent to eat or travel. You think that your parent can waiting for you but if you rethink your parent will get older and their body will in poor health. So take care your parent while they can eat and go to travel with you.  “ I can do all things through him who strengthens me” Philippians 4:13

If you want to be success, do not forget the important things in your life. You will be able to accomplish everything on your own. Successful must be happy, it doesn’t depend on how much money. It’s depend on you have enough money, you can take care your parent and you have a good health. If you miss somethings on these I think, you’re not success.

 

Final Exam Possible Score
Setsakhonkul, Kanrawee
Formatting 10 5
Writing Process 20 20
Topic Choice 10 5
Grammar 10 5
Total 35