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Final Draft
Songtai Sangtaweep Eng 101
Final writing assignment
Theme; how to be like Jesus
Essay type; Argumentative
Topic; where is your favorite place to escape
Every people may have their own sin. Some people go to church to get help. People need a place to feel save, and that might be Jesus. “I am a good sheperd”, this means we will be save if we believe in Jesus. Escape from our sin it might be the same feeling when you want to escape from the crowd. As we know, people need space sometime. Some people prefer to be alone when they feel stress, sad, down or even when they are happy. Some people like to be alone because they want to escape from the crowd. There are many places to go when you want to escape from the crowd. I have three places where i always go in order to escape from something.
Escaping to the sea
One of my favorite place to escape is sea. Like when twelve apostle help Jesus escape from the crowd. This might be the common place where people escape from the crowd in the city. As can be seen, sea is an undenial place to escape. In my opinion, i feel relief when i see the clear blue sky while hearing the sound of the wave hitting the sand beach. What i love more is the fresh sea breeze that make me feel so relax. When i went to the sea i always feel the happiness from others people. I love to wacthing people around me and guessing how their feeling is. I believe that the atmosphere in the city is totally different from the sea. The atmosphere in the city are full of sadness comparing the sea where the atmosphere is full of happiness. I believe every people seek happiness. This is the reason why they come to the sea.

Escaping to the snow
Another favorite place to escape from the crowd is the snow mountain. This is an another common place where people love to visitwhen they want to escape the crowd. There is a reason why people love to visit snow-mountain. In my opinion, snow means lonely. As can be seen, in winter season, snows come with coldness. Because of cold, people stay in their house rather than going out to somewhere. This means they do not get to meet anyone but themselve. When i see snows i woud feel lonely. The whiteness of the snow plus the cold breeze make me wondering how people who stay in the area do not move to somewhere else. This could freeze you to death any time and yet there are some people who like to live in this place. Although snows make me feel lonely, i still like this place.

Escaping to your home
My last favorite place is defenitly home. Some people stay outside more than they stay at home while someone love to stay in their house even they have nothing to do. i, for one, do like to stay home, if i have a chance. I am a busy man, but i always fine the time to stay home. The most likely reason that i escape the crowd to my house is that the room is full of myself. I believe that we will truly be ourselve when we are home. Comparing you with a white paper, when we go outside meeting so many people everyday we might not be ourselve. We might come back home like a colorful paper. However, when we are home we will aware that we can wash those color out and be ourselve at home again.
To sum up, there are three places that i choose to escape which are sea, snow mountain and home. I love to go to the see because of happiness. I like to see snow because i like to the felling of lonely, sometime. Lastly, i love to stay home because it full of myself. More importantly, if you have no place to escape, you still have Jesus to believe and you will be save.

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Songtai Sangtaweep Eng 101
Final writing assignment
Theme; how to be like Jesus
Essay type; Argumentative
Topic; where is your favorite place to escape
As we know, people need space sometime. Some people prefer to be alone when they feel stress, sad, down or even when they are happy. Some people like to be alone because they want to escape from the crowd. There are many places to go when you want to escape from the crowd. I have three places where i always go in order to escape from something.
Escaping to the sea
One of my favorite place to escape is sea. Like when twelve apostle help Jesus escape from the crowd. This might be the common place where people escape from the crowd in the city. As can be seen, sea is an undenial place to escape. In my opinion, i feel relief when i see the clear blue sky while hearing the sound of the wave hitting the sand beach. What i love more is the fresh sea breeze that make me feel so relax. When i went to the sea i always feel the happiness from others people. I love to wacthing people around me and guessing how their feeling is. I believe that the atmosphere in the city is totally different from the sea. The atmosphere in the city are full of sadness comparing the sea where the atmosphere is full of happiness. I believe every people seek happiness. This is the reason why they come to the sea.

Escaping to the snow
Another favorite place to escape from the crowd is the snow mountain. This is an another common place where people love to visitwhen they want to escape the crowd. There is a reason why people love to visit snow-mountain. In my opinion, snow means lonely. As can be seen, in winter season, snows come with coldness. Because of cold, people stay in their house rather than going out to somewhere. This means they do not get to meet anyone but themselve. When i see snows i woud feel lonely. The whiteness of the snow plus the cold breeze make me wondering how people who stay in the area do not move to somewhere else. This could freeze you to death any time and yet there are some people who like to live in this place. Although snows make me feel lonely, i still like this place.

Escaping to your home
My last favorite place is defenitly home. Some people stay outside more than they stay at home while someone love to stay in their house even they have nothing to do. i, for one, do like to stay home, if i have a chance. I am a busy man, but i always fine the time to stay home. The most likely reason that i escape the crowd to my house is that the room is full of myself. I believe that we will truly be ourselve when we are home. Comparing you with a white paper, when we go outside meeting so many people everyday we might not be ourselve. We might come back home like a colorful paper. However, when we are home we will aware that we can wash those color out and be ourselve at home again.

Second Draft
Songtai Sangtaweep Eng 101
Final writing assignment
Theme; how to be like Jesus
Essay type; Argumentative
Topic; where is your favorite place to escape
As we know, people need space sometime. Some people prefer to be alone when they feel stress, sad, down or even when they are happy. Some people like to be alone because they want to escape from the crowd. There are many places to go when you want to escape from the crowd. I have three places where i always go in order to escape from something.
Escaping to the sea
One of my favorite place to escape is sea. Like when twelve apostle help Jesus escape from the crowd. This might be the common place where people escape from the crowd in the city. As can be seen, sea is an undenial place to escape. In my opinion, i feel relief when i see the clear blue sky while hearing the sound of the wave hitting the sand beach. What i love more is the fresh sea breeze that make me feel so relax. When i went to the sea i always feel the happiness from others people. I love to wacthing people around me and guessing how their feeling is. I believe that the atmosphere in the city is totally different from the sea. The atmosphere in the city are full of sadness comparing the sea where the atmosphere is full of happiness. I believe every people seek happiness. This is the reason why they come to the sea.

Escaping to the snow
Another favorite place to escape from the crowd is the snow mountain. This is an another common place where people love to visitwhen they want to escape the crowd. There is a reason why people love to visit snow-mountain. In my opinion, snow means lonely. As can be seen, in winter season, snows come with coldness. Because of cold, people stay in their house rather than going out to somewhere. This means they do not get to meet anyone but themselve. When i see snows i woud feel lonely. The whiteness of the snow plus the cold breeze make me wondering how people who stay in the area do not move to somewhere else. This could freeze you to death any time and yet there are some people who like to live in this place. Although snows make me feel lonely, i still like this place.

Escaping to your home
My last favorite place is defenitly home. Some people stay outside more than they stay at home while someone love to stay in their house even they have nothing to do. i, for one, do like to stay home, if i have a chance. I am a busy man, but i always fine the time to stay home. The most likely reason that i escape the crowd to my house is that the room is full of myself. I believe that we will truly be ourselve when we are home. Comparing you with a white paper, when we go outside meeting so many people everyday we might not be ourselve. We might come back home like a colorful paper. However, when we are home we will aware that we can wash those color out and be ourselve at home again.

First Draft
Songtai Sangtaweep Eng 101
Final writing assignment
Theme; how to be like Jesus
Essay type; Argumentative
Topic; where is your favorite place to escape
​As we know, people need space sometime. Some people prefer to be alone when they feel stress, sad, down or even when they are happy. Some people like to be alone because they want to escape from the crowd. There are many places to go when you want to escape from the crowd. I have three places where i always go in order to escape from something.
Escaping to the sea
One of my favorite place to escape is sea. This might be the common place where people escape from the crowd in the city. As can be seen, sea is an undenial place to escape. In my opinion, i feel relief when i see the clear blue sky while hearing the sound of the wave hitting the sand beach. What i love more is the fresh sea breeze that make me feel so relax. When i went to the sea i always feel the happiness from others people. I love to wacthing people around me and guessing how their feeling is. I believe that the atmosphere in the city is totally different from the sea. The atmosphere in the city are full of sadness comparing the sea where the atmosphere is full of happiness. I believe every people seek happiness. This is the reason why they come to the sea.

Escaping to the snow
Another favorite place to escape from the crowd is the snow mountain. This is an another common place where people love to visitwhen they want to escape the crowd. There is a reason why people love to visit snow-mountain. In my opinion, snow means lonely. As can be seen, in winter season, snows come with coldness. Because of cold, people stay in their house rather than going out to somewhere. This means they do not get to meet anyone but themselve. When i see snows i woud feel lonely. The whiteness of the snow plus the cold breeze make me wondering how people who stay in the area do not move to somewhere else. This could freeze you to death any time and yet there are some people who like to live in this place. Although snows make me feel lonely, i still like this place.

Escaping to your home
My last favorite place is defenitly home. Some people stay outside more than they stay at home while someone love to stay in their house even they have nothing to do. i, for one, do like to stay home, if i have a chance. I am a busy man, but i always fine the time to stay home. The most likely reason that i escape the crowd to my house is that the room is full of myself. I believe that we will truly be ourselve when we are home. Comparing you with a white paper, when we go outside meeting so many people everyday we might not be ourselve. We might come back home like a colorful paper. However, when we are home we will aware that we can wash those color out and be ourselve at home again.

​Escaping to the sea

Escaping to snow

Escaping to your home