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By Ratsameedara Nunkliang

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St. Clare was born on July 16, 1194 and died on August 11, 1253. She was an Italian saint and was the first woman to follow the life of radical poverty practiced by St. Francis of Assisi. She was the co-founder of the Order of Poor Ladies, and also wrote Franciscan’s Rule of Life. After Clare’s death, the Order’s name was changed to “Order of Saint Clare” in honor of her. St. Clare is often portrayed as holding a pyx or monstrance, to commemorate the time when she turned to the soldiers at the door of her convent. August 11 is the memorial of St. Clare.

St. Clare was born on July 16, 1194 in Assisi. Her name was Chiara Offreduccio. She was the eldest daughter of Favori Sciffi and Ortolana. She had a father who was rich and had a mother who was a faithful woman of the prestigious family of Fiumi.

At the age of 18, In the Church of San Giorgioshe, When she heard the sermon of St. Francis of Assisi, her heart was filled with joy, hot with desire to simulate the life of Francis and to live a humble life for the Lord Jesus. In the evening, on the day of Palm Sunday in 1212, she secretly left her paternal home to meet Francis and she dedicated herself to the Lord.

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Under the command of Francis, Clare attended the monastery of Benedictine nuns of San Paulo. On the side of the parents, they were trying on every path to make her give up and be back home, but she refuses it. In order to lure her more than she needed Francis sent Clare to Sant’ Angelo in Panzo, the Benedictine nun’s convent.

Shortly after, her sister, Catarine or later on who became Saint Agnes, joined her at this convent. Then after, they had more women joined them. The Brides of Christ lived peacefully without worldly possessions. They became known as The Poor Ladies of San Damiano. As a rule that Francis had given them a second order, they all had a simple life. Both Clare and her sister lived without shoes. They didn’t eat meat. They lived in a shabby house. They kept quiet at all times. But they were happy and peaceful from the inside. From Christ who was with them always.

Clare became the abbess of San Damiano in 1216. For 40 years, she guided the San Damiano community, the center where was known as Order of Poor Ladies. While she was as a leader in her orders, Clare took care of Francis as he grew old. After Francis’ death, Clare continued his work and broadened her own influence.

St. Clare of Assisi

At one point in 1224, the troops of Vitalis d’Aversa took place in Assisi. And these troops suddenly invaded the convent. Clare herself was still very sick, went out to meet them with the Eucharist on her hands. She tried to support the wall with Blessed Sacrament in place of enemy visions could see it. She kneeled and pleaded for God to help her friends. And it seemed that her prayers were responding because they suddenly felt the fear of the unknown. Her deep devotion to the Eucharist spared the city.

She suffered from many diseases for many years. But she still insisted that no pain can be a problem for her life. She had great joy in serving the Lord. On August 9, 1253, Pope Innocent IV  announced that Clare’s rule would be used as a rule of Clare’s Order of Poor Ladies. And two days later, St. Clare died at age 59.

In August 1255, Pope Alexander IV canonized Clare, and today the Order of St. Clare numbers more than 20,000 sisters worldwide, with more than 70 countries represented.

 

Review

By Panida Chanmai

  • There are many misspellings for Clare.
  • The passage is too long, you should cut some off.
  • Combine small paragraphs together.

 

Second draft

By Ratsameedara Nunkliang

St. Clare was born on July 16, 1194 and died on August 11, 1253. She was an Italian saint and was one of the first disciples of Saint Francis of Assisi. She founded the “Order of Poor Ladies” and also wrote “Franciscan’s Rule of Life”. After Clare’s death, they the Order’s name was changed to “Order of Saint Clare” in honor of her. St. Clare is often portrayed as holding a pyx or monstrance, to commemorate the time when she turned to the soldiers at the door of her convent with the Blessed Sacrament. St. Clare’s feast day is celebrated on August 11.

Her birth was on July 16, 1194 in Assisi. Her name was Chiara Offreduccio. She was the eldest daughter of Favori Sciffi and Ortolana. She had a rich father for an ancient Roman family. And she had a mother who was a faithful woman of the prestigious family of Fiumi.

At the age of 18, In the Church of San Giorgioshe, When she heard the sermon of St. Francis of Assisi, her heart was filled with joy, hot with desire to simulate the life of Francis and to live a humble life for the Lord Jesus. In the evening, on the day of Palm Sunday in 1212, She decided to leave home to the Church of Porziuncula to meet Francis and she dedicated herself to the Lord. Claire got her hair cut off. She got the brown uniform in exchange for her rich dress.

Under the command of Francis, Claire attended the monastery of Benedictine nuns of San Paulo. On the side of the parents, they were trying on every path to make her give up and be back home. But she refuses and said she would not have a husband other than Jesus Christ. In order to lure her more than she needed Francis sent Claire to Sant’ Angelo in Panzo, the Benedictine nun’s convent.

Shortly after, her sister, Catarine or later on who became Saint Agnes, joined her at this convent.

After that, they had more women joined them. The Brides of Christ lived peacefully without worldly possessions. They became known as The Poor Ladies of San Damiano. As a rule that Francis had given them a second order, they all had a simple life. Both Clare and her sister lived without shoes. They didn’t eat meat. They lived in a shabby house. They kept quiet at all times. But they were happy and peaceful from the inside. From Christ who was with them always.

Clare’s new order was San Damiano became the center where was known as Order of Poor Ladies of San Damiano. In a short time, Saint Francis directed the order by himself. And Claire became the abbess of San Damiano in 1216.

While she was as a leader in her orders, Claire supported and assisted the man she saw as a spiritual father and took care of him as he grew older.

At one point in 1224, a troop invasion from Frederick II took place in Assisi. And these troops suddenly invaded the convent. Clare herself was still very sick, went out to meet them with the Eucharist on her hands. She tried to support the wall with Blessed Sacrament in place of enemy visions could see it. She kneeled, holding the Eucharist in her hand and pleaded for God to help her sisters.

Clare prayed, Oh, God, protect the disciples that I can not protect now. 

And it seemed that her prayers were responding because they suddenly felt the fear of the unknown. At that moment, sudden shock had occurred to the intruders and they fled without harming anyone in Assisi.

She suffered from many diseases for many years. But she still insisted that no pain can be a problem for her life. She had great joy in serving the Lord. She also once said that they say that we are too poor, but can a heart which possesses the infinite God be truly called poor?

On August 9, 1253, Pope Innocent IV  announced that Clare’s rule would be used as a rule of Clare’s Order of Poor Ladies. And two days later, Claire died at age 59.

 

First draft

By Ratsameedara Nunkliang

I’m going to give a sum up about St. Clair of Assisi’s story first. She was born on July 16, 1194 and died on August 11, 1253. Clare was an Italian saint. She was one of the first disciples of Saint Francis of Assisi. She founded the Order of Poor Ladies, a monastic order for females in Franciscan custom. She also wrote Franciscan’s Rule of Life, that is well known as it was written by a women. After Claire’s death, to honor of her they changed The Order of Poor Ladies to Order of Saint Clare. Clare is often portrayed as holding a pyx or monstrance, to commemorate the time when she turned to the soldiers at the door of her convent with the Blessed Sacrament. St. Clare’s feast day is celebrated on August 11.

All her storie is long enough. I will start by her birth on July 16, 1194 in Assisi. Her name was Chiara Offreduccio. She was the eldest daughter of Favori Sciffi and Ortolana. She had a rich father for an ancient Roman family. And she had a mother who was a faithful woman of the prestigious family of Fiumi.

At the age of 18, In the Church of San Giorgioshe, When she heard the sermon of St. Francis of Assisi, her heart was filled with joy, hot with desire to simulate the life of Francis and to live a humble life for the Lord Jesus. In the evening, on the day of Palm Sunday in 1212, She decided to leave home to the Church of Porziuncula to meet Francis and she dedicated herself to the Lord. Claire got her hair cut off. She got the brown uniform in exchange for her rich dress.

Under the command of Francis, Claire attended the monastery of Benedictine nuns of San Paulo. On the side of the parents, they were trying on every path to make her give up and be back home. But she refuses and said she would not have a husband other than Jesus Christ. In order to lure her more than she needed Francis sent Claire to Sant’ Angelo in Panzo, the Benedictine nun’s convent.

Shortly after, her sister, Catarine or later on who became Saint Agnes, joined her at this convent. The two remained there until they built a separate residence for them next to the church of San Damiano.

After that, they had more women joined them. The Brides of Christ lived peacefully without worldly possessions. They became known as The Poor Ladies of San Damiano. As a rule that Francis had given them a second order, they all had a simple life. Both Clare and her sister lived without shoes. They didn’t eat meat. They lived in a shabby house. They kept quiet at all times. But they were happy and peaceful from the inside. From Christ who was with them always.

Clare’s new order was San Damiano became the center where was known as Order of Poor Ladies of San Damiano. In a short time, Saint Francis directed the order by himself. And Claire became the abbess of San Damiano in 1216. After Clare died for ten years , this order became known as Order of Saint Clare.

While she was as a leader in her orders, Claire defended them from the efforts of the prelates to impose them on the more closely following the Rule of St. Benedict than Francis. Claire dedicated to Francis and often referred to as another Francis.  She supported and assisted the man she saw as a spiritual father and took care of him as he grew older.

After Francis’ death, Claire continued to support her bid to fight with every effort from the pope to try to impose a rule on her order.

At one point in 1224, a troop invasion from Frederick II took place in Assisi. And these troops suddenly invaded the convent. Clare herself was still very sick, went out to meet them with the Eucharist on her hands. She tried to support the wall with Blessed Sacrament in place of enemy visions could see it. She kneeled, holding the Eucharist in her hand and pleaded for God to help her sisters.

Clare prayed, Oh, God, protect the disciples that I can not protect now. And it seemed that her prayers were responding because they suddenly felt the fear of the unknown. At that moment, sudden shock had occurred to the intruders and they fled without harming anyone in Assisi.

She suffered from many diseases for many years. But she still insisted that no pain can be a problem for her life. She had great joy in serving the Lord. She also once said that they say that we are too poor, but can a heart which possesses the infinite God be truly called poor?

On August 9, 1253, Pope Innocent IV  announced that Clare’s rule would be used as a rule of Clare’s Order of Poor Ladies. And two days later, Claire died at age 59.

 

Final Exam Possible Score
Nunkliang, Ratsameedara
Formatting 10 10
Writing Process 20 20
Topic Choice 10 10
Grammar 10 5
Total 45